The Cruyff turn did not need to be expressed in haiku form. It was pure poetry in itself. It had never been seen before. Beautiful. When I try one I often end up on my arse.

Comment is about One Nil (blog)

Original item by Nash

Most Hopeless eh? Can't argue with that! :-)

Comment is about Pandora's Box - Review (blog)

Original item by Isobel

I love this Ray. It seems to be about something or someone in particular, and so remains a mystery to me, but I like mysteries and the language is great. I love the last verse especially.

Comment is about Brown Study (blog)

Oh Cruyffs, that's that dog show isn't it? Maybe you should embrace the springer? hehe x

Comment is about One Nil (blog)

Original item by Nash

Hey Anthony - did you mean a tampax? ;-)

Comment is about TIME OF THE MONTH/FOOTBALL POEM (blog)

Original item by Nash

Shoeless, AE & Peter - er, what? Not sure, lukewarm is the best thing anyone's ever said, but I'll take it on board. Cheers, chaps!

Comment is about TIME OF THE MONTH/FOOTBALL POEM (blog)

Original item by Nash

Francine and Isobel I think you've got this just right.
After all, perhaps going for an outright winner would just open up a can of worms (or should that be pandora's box) some hopes!!

Comment is about Pandora's Box - Review (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Hi Andy, thank you so much for your kind comments on "I thought of you". I'm glad you enjoyed it, and am considering your advice.
Just been reading your samples and can honestly say I love them all, especially "Perfect Place"
Cheers x

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Wow, you've worked hard! My only wish is that Hatta had entered! I'm sure her take on Pandora would have been truly incredible! x

Comment is about Pandora's Box - Review (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Hi again, Anthony. Just been reading the story of Neil Moss, and I found your poem beautiful. Moved me to tears. Thanks.

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

for a short piece, kath.. i think this does carry some impact. would like to move wrote like this.. keep em coming! x

Comment is about Just a note (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

This has a real song like quality to it, Lynn which makes it really easy to enjoy and love.If I am honest, I am not wild on the use of your last line even though it starts your piece off. I would perhaps even remove it totally or put something else after it like slightly re-writing Stefan's favourite line:



'I thought of you again today

It made me shiver in the heat'


Either way, I enjoyed reading this a lot x

Comment is about I Thought Of You (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi again Lynn.very romantic! I especially love the lines

'you saw me shiver
in the heat'

lovely indeed!

warmest regards
Stefan-x

Comment is about I Thought Of You (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Good evening Lynn-thank you very much indeed for comments on 'building-etc' and 'call for awareness'very pleased that you liked them-hope that you are enjoying the wonderful poetry on the blogs today.thanks a lot-Stefan-x

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi Ann, thanks for commenting upon my sub-aqua fairy tale :) Glad you enjoyed it - best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Yep, your poetry has depth, that's for sure. Although this feels more like poetic prose than anything more formal (not a criticism btw) and there's a lot to absorb as many of the nouns seem to be modified - but I enjoy reading your poetry because it 'feels' poetic. If that makes sense...?

Look forward to reading more.

Comment is about Our Home Cannot Be Here (blog)

Original item by Tom

A good one, enjoyed this.

Comment is about Our Home Cannot Be Here (blog)

Original item by Tom

Tragic, but I like it!

Comment is about Tempest (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

i liked the smoke in the (brandy) glass like planetary atmosphere. also that pandoras legacy pervades to this day...

Comment is about Pandora's Legacy (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Fair enough shoeless! For me, the football is like fire, the menstrual cycle is like ice. The resulting poem is like lukewarm water. And I'm thirsty.

Comment is about TIME OF THE MONTH/FOOTBALL POEM (blog)

Original item by Nash

Thanks for your comment on my latest Ann - I've stuck an explanation on the poem. x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thanks for your very generous comment Cynthia. I often wish I could 'think' a little more fluently. I've posted a little explanation on the poem. May see you at Sale tonight. x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thanks for your comments all. I think I was trying to be too subtle. The idea behind the second verse is that - along with all the ills of the world, hope was sealed back up in the box. The world is safe but lacks that thrill - becomes monotonous and dull. The glass is a beer glass, the smoke, a cigarette. The last line is my attempt at irony.
Sorry if that disappoints any of you!

Comment is about Pandora's Legacy (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Can't get poor Neil out of my head. I went pot holing once. The most horrible experience! I think I may have heard a radio 4 programme about this incident (Neil) a couple of years ago. So haunting! And tragic too. And the audio is splendid. My favourite poem for a long time.

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

I like this one a lot Isobel. I can't quite get my head round the change that occurs between the two verses, tho. xx

Comment is about Pandora's Legacy (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Enchantment indeed! What a lovely description of a daddy seahorse! xx

Comment is about Hippocampus and Friend (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Just logged in to thank you for your lovely comment on Grains. I was thinking that the last bit needed a bit of work! I loved your white cat hunting poem by the way! And enjoyed Death of a Leader. "You twisted love into hooks , truth into lures ,
To capture souls more generous than yours." is a great line. Look forward to more poems from you!

Comment is about stephen smith (poet profile)

Original item by stephen smith

You must think in poetry, Isobel. I do like it, the first stanza especially. For me, I could have stopped right there with a big sigh. The words were like a drugging elixir.

Comment is about Pandora's Legacy (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Hi Isobel - 'Chin-Chin' (Panda's Box) is on my profile page if you need it. I'm sure it's far too cerebral for the average drunken bum and my Latin isn't what it once was - Toodli Bye Byeum.

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Hi A.E. LOL, Re Coming home without you. Actually this is about a different kind of love. It was the scenario that greeted me last time I dropped off my daughter and returned home to an empty house. I will go and do the washing up now... Win x

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Girl in black cape - yes, that was the idea!

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

If they had asked The Bard to write "Pandora", then told him to submit the "treatment" this would be it.

Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about Pandora's Legacy (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Remind me to treat myself to a tandem.

Comment is about TIME OF THE MONTH/FOOTBALL POEM (blog)

Original item by Nash

this poem has a story eh ? @ peter myself i have always quite liked the menstrual cycle ..

Comment is about TIME OF THE MONTH/FOOTBALL POEM (blog)

Original item by Nash

Good stuff, Isobel.. Look forward if this is still a progress in work to seeing the final version! Keep em coming! x

Comment is about Pandora's Legacy (blog)

Original item by Isobel

I think I know a few ..
love the last two lines.
Cx

Comment is about cat (blog)

Original item by Shoeless Carole

So pleased you've put your work on here Carole.
Cx

Comment is about Shoeless Carole (poet profile)

Original item by Shoeless Carole

Very nice Kath! I love the rhythm through this poem! Great work! :-) x

Comment is about Just a note (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

Hi Anthony - many thanks for letting me include "Visiting Neil" on my website - it's a mightily impressive & moving poem. you can see it here if you wish
http://www.poemsetfree.com/index.php?page=favourite-poems-by-other-authors You might like Anne Foxglove's Coromandel above yours; another one of my very favourites. Thanks again. B

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

"..and as your toes you flex,
sense there once stood as you,
tyrannosaurus rex!"

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Love it and have e-mailed a suggestion for the penultimate line...sorry , it's so good , I had to.it bursts like a wave of images.
Steve Smith

Comment is about grains (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

A good image there. To the point.

Comment is about Escapism (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

I have always been a fan of a good football poem, but not so much a fan of the menstrual cycle.

Comment is about TIME OF THE MONTH/FOOTBALL POEM (blog)

Original item by Nash

Hi Dave - and thanks for helpful comments (Grains). I promise that one day (when I maybe break my leg or am confined to home due to a slipped disc or something) that I WILL go back and sort out all my poems! I know I am usesless in this respect - but it's only cos I am new to this lark! Anyway, thank you and maybe I will redo! Lots of love anyway! Ann xx

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Hi Dave - and thanks for helpful comments. I promise that one day (when I maybe break my leg or am confined to home due to a slipped disc or something) that I WILL go back and sort out all my poems! I know I am usesless in this respect - but it's only cos I am new to this lark! Anyway, thank you and maybe I will redo! Lots of love anyway! Ann xx

Comment is about grains (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

sheer luck...as with most everything!

Comment is about Nash (poet profile)

Original item by Nash

yup! : )

Comment is about TIME OF THE MONTH/FOOTBALL POEM (blog)

Original item by Nash

I really liked the ideas in this, Ann, and the cast of mind it embodies of wondering at everything, of knowing that nothing is 'just' something. Everything has a story, sand is not just sand, it has a fascinating tale to tell. I do feel that you could have done more to do something special with the language to match the really interesting images and thoughts. I know you don't like going back on poems but really think this one might be worth it.

Comment is about grains (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Before breakfast? Good time of day to write, obviously. Enjoyed this, edited or not.

Comment is about Pandora's Legacy (blog)

Original item by Isobel

I love this Isobel... It is full of hope : )
Especially these lines:

'Mind over matter
is the key
and so
with will of iron
Epimetheus
unwishes
the ills that she set free.'

Hmmm... The more I read this - the more powerful it becomes... The hope is in the will of the outcome - regardless of how it is interpreted. I do see what it is you are alluding to, but unless it is totally obvious - It is just my nature to see the positive and the good ; )

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Original item by Isobel