Thank you, Chris

Comment is about Just Because (For Rupert Anson the last scoundrel in Speke) (blog)

Original item by Nash

i really really liked reading this! Thanks! Love the inclusion of so many bands i actually recognise and know! :)

Comment is about Pop Zoo (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

This one was influenced by Banksy's version and I stole the title from Val Cook!
Written before breakfast, it could probably benefit from some editing but there is no time for that. Tomorrow it will be so yesterday! LOL

Comment is about Pandora's Legacy (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Gooooood morning the loveliest of all Lynns! thanks for all ongoing commented kindnesses.Have a spiffing Sunday-will catch you later.Stefan.x

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi Lee,

And welcome to WOL. I guess the best way to get into the site is to take a look around - especially the blog and discusions - and if you see something that's interesting drop a comment in! You'll soon find everyone is generally friendly and quite helpful if you think you might need some feedback, advice or assistance. Go for it - and have fun.

Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about LEE JAMES BLUNT (poet profile)

Original item by LEE JAMES BLUNT

Thanks Anthony for your advice on my "Angel on Horseback". I agreed with you and have made changes. Thanks again. All the Best, Lynn

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Your poems always stand out Thomas. Glad to see you're still posting

Comment is about Our Home Cannot Be Here (blog)

Original item by Tom

cheers Kath re me 'lovey poem-re your 'roady' poem earlier-sad to hear about Dennis Hoppers death.thanks again Kath-Stefan.

Comment is about Kath Hewitt (poet profile)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

Lol Stefan, thanks for commenting - I only just realised how to blog!!

Anthony, I think you are right, thanks for the advice, I shall have a re-think.

Comment is about Angel on Horseback (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thankyou eagle eyes. Win ;-)

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thank you so much Cate for the lovely comments on
'Pandora's Affliction'...
So I have a style now - LOL
I will try and break free on my next one ; )

xxx

Comment is about Cate (poet profile)

Original item by Cate

Dave,
Thank you for your lovely comments on my poem 'Pandora's Affliction'... and your wonderful, overall generous appreciation : )

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

If you can be bovvered - my son has a version of cubase and can fiddle round with your poem - adding echo at the beginning and end - you would need to send me the audio file...also tell me whether you want single or double echo and where - the double echo is very heavy - you wouldn't want too much of it.

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Hi,

I honestly hadn't picked up that i had used aspiration twice, well. i suppose i knew but didn't, kind of!
Inspiration definately fits better for the last stanza so changes have been made.
Thank you

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Hi Val,

Thanks for visiting "Neil" and your more than generous comments. Sometimes I think truth really is stranger than fiction. I'm glad his story touched you.

Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about Valerie Cook (poet profile)

Original item by Valerie Cook

Hi Greg,

Thanks for visiting "Neil" and your generous comments. I'm glad his story moved you. It's something I've had in my mind since I was a child, and sharing it was, I suppose, a kind of minor therapy.

Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Hi Kath,

Did you have a dictionary for breakfast yesterday? This works well for me as you acheive meaning with economy. The one word you might wish to look at (and I see you use it twice, so it might be a typo!) is the second "aspiration" (second line, last stanza)Did you mean "inspiration"? It's just that it seems to make more sense.

Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

Hi Lynn,

I wanted to say that I like the picture you paint here. I like her cheekiness -

"Were there other hi's?"

You might wish to consider a couple of things which jarred a little:

"Oblivious to wetting her jeans."

Although your readers will understand exactly what you mean, there is a subconscious subtext with this line! Perhaps consider phrasing it a little differently? Say something like "seaspray on her jeans?"

The other line which seems a little incongruous is:


"Her hands in his copper fur."

I think you'll probably know where I'm coming from! Maybe you could rearrange your rhyme scheme to enable you to change it to "hair" or "mane"?

These are simply observations - it's your poem, your words and if you are happy with them then that's all that really matters!

Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about Angel on Horseback (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Good morning Lynn.Can,t stop-just on my way-for horse riding lessons! lol! lovely poem-thanks-Stefan.x

Comment is about Angel on Horseback (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Morning young Hewitt.I,m happy 'Burdened' made you feel sad-er...no I,m not! lol! ta Kath-Stefan.

Comment is about Kath Hewitt (poet profile)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

what?no beer! good'un Kath-a neat'n'sweet treat-ta-Stefan.

Comment is about Escapism (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

Just been to your blogspot to have a look at your work there - great photos! - particularly like the Venice shots.
Cx

Comment is about Nash (poet profile)

Original item by Nash

I like most of your work, always read it even if I don't always comment, but I can't make up my mind about this.
I don't know if you know Radiohead's 'Creep'? - that conveys similar sentiments, but perhaps a little more tongue-in-cheek? I feel that you could perhaps inject a little more irony in to this, invite your audience to empathise with the feeling most of us get from time to time of not being good enough, rather than to pity you for it. It's not a funny subject but it's wanting a little humour, does that make sense? - feel free to ignore if you think I'm talking rubbish. :)
Cx

Comment is about Flat Lines (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

I like this very much ... I can see the snapshot clearly, and the last Cx

Comment is about There is nothing better than a truly beautiful sky (blog)

Original item by Nash

Beautiful.
Cx

Comment is about Just Because (For Rupert Anson the last scoundrel in Speke) (blog)

Original item by Nash

I, too, really like this - and would agree with Ann's remarks, thoughtful &thought-provoking.
Well done.
Cx

Comment is about white cat hunting (blog)

Original item by stephen smith

A gifted poem, your words provide delicate justice to the emormity of the tragedy, I appreciate the link to the explanation.TC

Comment is about Visiting Neil (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Thanks Dave, glad to have caused enjoyment. Re-read yr old txts gd 4 me still.
Steve Smith

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Thank you Anthony for providing the story around your poem. You have a true gift with words. Your poem was excellent,sad, compassionate and memorable. I know Neil Moss will forever be in my thoughts from now on.

Comment is about Visiting Neil (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

This is a weird one John - as I could only expect from you! At least blame seems to be sqarely on man's shoulders with a poor throat slashed Pandora lying in a pool of blood...blood on his hands indeed...
An interesting take - the earth coming out to swallow man up - aint that just a prophecy?

Comment is about Pandora's Box (Blind At The Root) (blog)

Original item by John Togher

No, but that's where this came from - a friend was having a bad time and she told me that she pulled over and listened to music and watched the moon. So I wrote it for her to cheer her up.

Comment is about There is nothing better than a truly beautiful sky (blog)

Original item by Nash

I feel quite overwhelmed by this story, Anthony, one of the most poignant I've ever heard. It gives your fine poem even more resonance

Comment is about Visiting Neil (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Thank you, Ann. It's all true

Comment is about Just Because (For Rupert Anson the last scoundrel in Speke) (blog)

Original item by Nash

did you find it in an old box? this is great...i love stories told in this way and all the dark oceanic suicide bits always appeal to me...
i like the way the box blows his head off :)

Comment is about Pandora's Box (Blind At The Root) (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Oh God, the explanation is more heartrending than the poem! x

Comment is about Visiting Neil (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Did you see the moon last night? Wow! Gold and huge and full and low. Beautiful!

Comment is about There is nothing better than a truly beautiful sky (blog)

Original item by Nash

I love this. A very "real" poem.

Comment is about Just Because (For Rupert Anson the last scoundrel in Speke) (blog)

Original item by Nash

I like this one too.
Cx

Comment is about Our Home Cannot Be Here (blog)

Original item by Tom

I agree with Marianne, a beautiful study of obsessiveness. Well done.
Cx

Comment is about This Infinity (blog)

Original item by Tom

Hi,
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment. A sequel? Argh, don't think i'm up to that!!As for apologising, well, i think it's in my nature to say for sorry for most things i do! The stuff i write just seems to be there and i kinda feel like a fraud when people comment positively on them. I suppose i should just say ta and get on with it ha ha.
Thank you for a lovely comment x

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Hi Kath,

I missed this somewhere in the "Pandora" mix - so apologies for not commenting earlier. This is a great exercise in imagination and building up a picture and mood. I think you could do well to think about a sequel to this - the ending seems to suggest it. And I don't think it's a "sort of" - it's your story, your take on the theme. Never apologise for what you write!

Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about Pandoras box ( sort of ) (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

Good afternoon Larisa-A lot of strength in these words.Lovely!and the photograph too! Stefan.

Comment is about I am as I am (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Good afternoon Kath.Nice,me seeing you,seeing me!....Stefan.x

Comment is about Kath Hewitt (poet profile)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

Marianne, hi. Thanks a lot for your comment on my poem today. Much appreciated! It's still too new for me to know whether it's any good or not. TB

Comment is about Marianne Daniels (poet profile)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

I love the honesty of this piece.
the language is beautiful. especially loved the lines:
"No thought can form while she has not spurned
all I can do is hang myself on her polite decline"
the defeatism (sp?) is so brave, I lost myself in this completely. excellent.

Comment is about This Infinity (blog)

Original item by Tom

Have you ever drunk WD40 mixed with wine and tried to say "And now the words keep tumbling out just fine?"

Comment is about I Wrote a Line (with apologies to Johnny Cash) (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

Tee hee - was never good at maths...
Re the audio - it is probably only worth fiddling round as an experiment if it is easy for you to do so. It is far better with the echo than without - a sound effect that really fits a purpose. You may find it works better all the way through - it was just an idea... x

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Thanks Rodney. If I do that though it becomes less a poem and more a piece of prose. it's just a snapshot - a glimpse across a landscape at something(one) beautiful...or supposed to be

The mountain: readers choice - but carrying on from the opener, I hope that people will connect the two (especially the shape) and think nose.

Sam Cooke - everything he sang was with dignity, especially for the time. Hear whatever you would like - I hear 'Change gonna come'! Nothing is better than Sam Cooke singing that, not even the sky.

Cheers

Nash

Comment is about There is nothing better than a truly beautiful sky (blog)

Original item by Nash

Nice one indeed but what does "And tumbling keep the words now just out fine" mean?

Comment is about I Wrote a Line (with apologies to Johnny Cash) (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

Loved this John... Mesmerising and powerful.

Comment is about Pandora's Box (Blind At The Root) (blog)

Original item by John Togher