Like this but it seems a bit hurried and there's perhaps more of your voice to put in, and perhaps a few details eg the mountain's broken it's leg, what was Sam Cooke singing? why was it dignified? etc

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You have a deep insight into the politics of war...May be your poetry provides peace...One Love

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Sweet Morning;
Rise!

Blessed to see your light...

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Hi Isobel,

Re: no body... no alterations

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This was an old poem/song lyric I used with a band in 2008. Forgot all about it till I read through some of the Pandora stuff.

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thanks for commenting on BIG DIAMONDS :)

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thanks for your comments on BIG DIAMONDS :)

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thankyou Gus x :)

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Hi Lee
Welcome to WOL keep posting! Winston

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Good morning Marianne-please accept apology for late reply on 'flawless blush'just back from days of knotted hankies and deckchairs etc-agree re alliteration comments indeed!appreciate your kindness-Stefan.

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Good morning Alison.please excuse late reply for your kind comment on 'pure waste'(been on hols)thank you.Stefan.

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Good morning Lynn.thank you for your regards(pre holiday)and comments on 'immortal intensity'hope you are well.catch you later-best wishes-Stefan.

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Thanks for comment on mine Cate. I see we are both asking questions. 'That'll do Babe'.

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Hi Barrie, theres a lot to think about in this one. A lot of moral and religious dilemmas highlighted here. I think this is a very brave poem and not one a lot would tackle. I only know one thing, the human race is very unlikely to "die out from a progeny dearth." The way mankind is increasing its more likely we`ll die out because this mother earth cant sustain us.... then God can "inherit the earth."
A thought provoking poem
Cate xx

Comment is about JOBSA GOOD'N (blog)

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Well it made me want to log in and comment. Bloody brilliant!
I needed a laugh today. Thanks :-)

Comment is about Pandora's Box (blog)

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Thanks Ann. I know Renfield: played wonderfully by Lord Tom Waits in the Coppola version, completely insane, Dracula's pet...

...maybe you're right

Comment is about THE FLY (blog)

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Us females tread a difficult path - how to have fun without being considered lightweight or vain....
Glad you liked the pic - let it never be said that I bow to pressure...xx

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Totally loved this - thank you for putting the effort in to a longish one with a great silly conclusion.

Comment is about Pandora's Box (blog)

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lot off good bits in it, dave.. flowed really well - maybe a lil long for my taste but this is a pleasure to read!!!!!

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Hi Cate - many thanks for your kind comments (sunday best) B.

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Absolutely fab!

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What an interesting poem! Somehow it sounds as if it was written by Renfield, a character who makes a very brief appearance in the book Dracula. But he eats flies. But I think he might cry about them too!

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AND ANOTHER THING! ;-) In Poetess, the verse I don't like so much and would have cut, Chris Dawson (whose opinion I very much value) says she likes that bit the best. So what's a girl to do?? Maybe it's best to write then leave for a month then take another look, but I simply cannot do that. When I write something I like to get it out there, then it's on to the next one.

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Hi Anthony.
Thanks for comment on Pandora's Box. While you were commenting I was reading your poem about Neil and went on to read his story. Both pieces are so engaging and sensitively written. Something I shall read again I am sure.
I have a tragic story to tell from years gone by that affected my family. Will probably post it in August.
Best wishes. Dave

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Hi Gus - thank you for commenting on Poetess. Editing (editting?) scares the whatever out of me, I don't know why but that's probably a common thing with newish poets who haven't studied writing poetry. It's the fear of losing the good bits perhaps. If I try and edit this one, may I put it here as a comment on your profile page and see what you think? Or is there an editing school I can go to! ;-) xx

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Hi Anthony,
Thanks for your comments on 'Play Me' - really made me laugh, so pleased you liked the poem.
Cx

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Hi there,
Thanks for your comment on 'Play Me', glad you liked it.
Cx

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Fantastic!
Cx

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Hi Dave,
Thanks for your comment on 'Play Me', glad you liked it.
Cx

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Sounds good gal... Im partial to the odd diamond or two{or three} myself!
Cate xx

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A very amusing poem... made me laugh out loud! Its amazing how you put pairs of socks into the washer and loads of odd ones come out! At least I can now blame it on Pandora!!
Cate xx

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The Best! x

Comment is about Pandora's Box (blog)

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Hi Dave,

You been spying on me? (Maybe not - even I wouldn't do socks with sandals!) A fitting illustration of why we shouldn't judge by appearances. Had to look up "crutonic" though - where did you find that one? Nunty (numpty?) and zooker had me floundering too - but any new words ae welcome!

Thanks for visiting "Neil" and your comments. I think that remembering Neil's story and the consequent parental warnings probably put me off potholes for life ("don't go near there or you'll end up like . . .") I'm really impressed you did the Cheese Press. For me the test seems so much more mental than physical - although I doubt they make potholes in my width these days!

Regards,
A.E.

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Good one! Love to see if you can perform it without losing it! Maybe see you at the Tudor to test it out.
Cate xx

Comment is about human being (blog)

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Hi Alison. The first Lance poem I have ever seen! Win

Comment is about Falling hero (blog)

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Yes!

I'm with Gus - the last pic was very short-lived!

Thank you for visting "Neil" and your helpful and generous comments. I agree with all you say re the audio. I'm not too sure what I'm doing with it at the moment - a learning curve; so any comments/technical assistance are/is appreciated. I'll have a play around with it, but I'm pleased you saw what I had in mind. Sorry if I made you cry - it makes me cry too when I think about him.

Regards,A.E. x

p.s. You miscalculated - it's "LI" not "LII" - "LII" is sooo next year!

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Hi Cate,

Thanks for visiting "Neil" and your comments. I guess it's a story that's haunted me all of my life. It was a strange and somehow comforting experience to write about him and share it with people. I guess the truth of the story makes it more powerful. Perhaps truth is, as they say STRONGER than fiction. I'm pleased it touched you.

Regards,
A.E.

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Hi S.C. (I wasn't sure if it was Shoeless, or Carole - or both)

Thanks for visiting "Neil" and your comments.

I looked at this earlier but didn't have time to comment - and now notice (as others have) that you have exchanged boobs for bivouacs (prefer boobs myself, but then I would, I'm a bloke!)

Like the chap visiting the shrink who told him, "Doctor, some days I think I'm a tepee, others I think I'm a marquee."
" I see the problem" said the Doc, "You're simply too tense."

Wear those rocks with pride!

Regards,
A.E.

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Hi Alison,

And thanks for visiting "Neil" and your comments. Good to see poetry on contemporary issues - and handled deftly with the weaving-in of technical and relevant expressions.

Regards,
A.E.

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Hi Ray,

Thanks for your comments on "Visiting Neil." Any crit/crib is always welcome and valued. I'm not sure if you've read the note I posted shortly after; this may put the piece in a slightly different context.

This immediately put me in mind of Eminem's work. Fantastic manipulation of half-rhymes/off-rhymes and assonances throughout, tricking and toying with your reader's expectations to create that almost staccato effect. I always admire your obvious technical skills; when they are matched by content and context it just gets better.

Regards,
A.E.

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You have returned to the defensive and aggressive pic again.... NEED yer legs!!!

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Hi Ann,

And thanks for visiting "Neil." There seems to quite a lot of "sensual" stuff being penned by you ladies at the moment. Are they putting something in the water?

Just one small query - What's "foreplay?" ;-)

I always feel I ought to be trying to write something erotic from the male perspective, but haven't managed it yet. Women are so much better at it.

Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about the poetess (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Picasso roaming

foaming into the heart of a

Manchester coffee break

slipping out of her shoe

she bleeds into the the blue memory stones of somewhere

Squinting

Watching rose tinting Matadors
Paint out politicos with strokes of dazzle day sunlight

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Hi Dave,

I'm a big fan of the use of dialect in poetry - and humour too. We are sometimes so serious about poetry we forget how to laugh. I'm glad that you're around to remind us. Got to keep those chuckle-muscles working!

Regards,
A.E.

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Hi Ann,

Apologies for not commenting on this earlier. You posted it when I was off-site for a while so I missed it; and only now (via a very circuitous route) have discovered it. You don't need to change anything in this, and I would second Banksy's comments - it's a beautiful poem, delicately and thoughtfully handled. If there were a riposte to Auden's "Funeral Blues" this would be it. The title draws the reader in (isn't Coromandel a fantastic word - in the same way that Timbuktu and Samarkand and Xanadu are?) There is only one thing wrong with this - I wish I'd written it!

Regards,
A.E.

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

No mention of sex Carole.... save the reference to sexual intercourse and size ....

Quote - 'and fuck off big diamonds'


Mmmmmmm... it always comes down to the same old issues...

Wonderful poem!!

Gus xx

Comment is about BIG DIAMONDS (blog)

Original item by Shoeless Carole

a mouthful of poems...
come now...
... you don't expect me to swallow that, do you?

Seriously though this poem, which is good, could have , in my opinion, been superb if you had edited it a few times over.

Take your time... your work is worth it.

Gusxx

Comment is about the poetess (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I like this one Kath! Sad and poignant :-)

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Original item by Kath Hewitt

This really gets the imagination going. Well written Steve.

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Original item by stephen smith

A marvellous piece of writing, and a remarkable story which really should be kept alive. So vivid and moving. I've been through the Cheesepress in Long Churn. Bad enough but kid's stuff compared with what Neil was doing.

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