Excellent.
I've seen him in Netto. Ooops!

Comment is about human being (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Enjoyed reading all the Pandora's Box poems. Here's something silly from me.
Dave

Comment is about Pandora's Box (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

Banksy - you're obviously with the wrong woman!

Comment is about the poetess (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi - Ann - yes I guess we should WALOP. Only problem being that people must email me with poems they feel worthy of nomination, for us then to all to vote on a winner. I have only had a couple of people do that so far. Do you have a list for me? If so, do email me... I will put a reminder up tomorrow. I guess Pandora's box may end up on two lists - but that doesn't matter, since the original idea was just a bit of fun.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I feel I should have said something else - superb writing - the sort that touches you inside and leaves you feeling like you can't say enough...

Comment is about Visiting Neil (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

I'm glad you posted the explanation of who Neil is and how he died - it helps to understand the poem better and the sound effects.

I liked the introduction - like a conversation with an old friend before you launch into the meat of the poem.

I would have liked the echoing effects to diminish or cease from 'a firmament...' onwards and then pick up again towards the end. I say this because the words were so beautiful, I wanted to hear the weight of them without the distraction of the echo.

I think the echo effect represented perfectly the sounds you'd hear trapped in a cave - also the slipping in and out of consciousness of a dying mind.

I found the poem incredibly moving and yes I cried... There are too many beautiful lines to comment on, so I will just leave it at that. x

Comment is about Visiting Neil (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Hi - "Visiting Neil" - would you allow me to put this on my website under "favourite poems by other authors" ? all the best. B

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

what can we say - I'm sure you can hear the applause. B

Comment is about Visiting Neil (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Beautiful. Just beautiful. Such a wonderful richness of language and imagery, and this poem will touch so many people on so many different levels. Anthony you have surpassed yourself!!
Cate xx

Comment is about Visiting Neil (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Oh just some things I brought for you
I thought you might have missed – comforts, more for me than you
perhaps,

The whole poem is very accurate but, yes taking gifts to a grave side is a most devastating moment in life

Comment is about Visiting Neil (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

I'm soft. My eyes welled up too. In a good way.

Comment is about Visiting Neil (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Ta very much, Tommy, Dave and Andy.

Comment is about Bad Faith (blog)

Beautiful, I love such poems as these, and though it seems churlish to crib it, I shall anyway. The excellence of the poem lies between "a firmament of winter stars" and "an agnostic's faltering prayer". I think if you ended there and abbreviated the intro somewhat you'd have a great poem.

Comment is about Visiting Neil (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

I used "unthought" in the last poem I posted, without being certain it's a proper word. So I'll assume it is now.I love your inventive way with language, without always grasping what you're on about, though that's not the be-all. Funnily enough, I thought the best line was the simple "It makes me want to stamp my feet".

Comment is about The Hour of the Critic (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Hi Andy, thanks for your feedback. I do agree with you about not needing hard and defensive together but when i read it back again i cant seem to not say it now. x

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Hi, dear Ann! Thank you very much for congratulating me with my birthday. Your birthday is on the 26th of May, isn't it? We are really spiritually very close to each other. My congratulations to you. We say here: better late than never. With warmest wishes, Larisa

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Yes, this is superb. Its language, its pace but overall its theme which resonates with me as I lost a childhood 'best friend' when we were both just 15.

Great writing Anthony.

Comment is about Visiting Neil (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Hi;

I referred my painter friend Olga over to your comment on your paintings... Have you being given any links off her stuff to look at online (there is a few bits and pieces) x

Comment is about Marianne Daniels (poet profile)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

enjoyed this, marianne.. top banana in particular 'a suspended child willing the will of work away' but the language is generally pretty crisp and shows a lot of thought...

i enjoyed this! x

Comment is about The Hour of the Critic (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

excellent dave.. i would totally fail to keep a straight face if i was trying to perform this however.. lol

Comment is about human being (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

couple of layers there, kath which could be take several ways but i like the way you change it from the third person to the first person in the last stanza works pretty well..

not sure if you need both defensive and hard on the last stanza as i think it adds a extra beat which doesn't exist in the first two stanzas..

either way, top banana - i think you are defo getting better x

Comment is about (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

excellent stuff - lot of good lines but my favourite is 'the ill-defined tremor of repeat prescriptions'

andy n

Comment is about Bad Faith (blog)

Me too ... absolutely wonderful. Love it!
Cx

Comment is about Visiting Neil (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Are we WOLOPing this month? And thank you so much for lovely comment on "Poetess" too. x

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Blimey Tommy - you windin' me up? ;-) I promise if I ever write the sequal ("Let My Second Cousin Twice Removed Be A Gnu") that the giraffe will have a special verse just for you! But don't hold your breath! x

Comment is about family (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

What a wonderful poem Anthony. Made me cry. Those last four lines particularly. x

Comment is about Visiting Neil (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

You pose some interesting questions Dave, related to puzzles and life...
I personally get frustrated when my puzzles have missing pieces ; )

Comment is about Jigsaw (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

We can all relate to your words in some respect Rosemary, because nobody wants to be ignored or feel the indifference of another they have loved.

Powerful lines:

'It kills me slowly, stabbing the goddess within
It razors my heart in two
And leaves me longing for word of you.'

'a void unfilled now grows within
A black hole in my soul'

Comment is about Golden Silence? (blog)

I really like this poem. The image of the cat caught my attention straight away. Then, the "I too was hunting" section brings in regret and memory in a very moving way. A thoughtful piece.

Comment is about white cat hunting (blog)

Original item by stephen smith

"Her breasts are a rhyming couplet"

Probably the best line of poetry I have came across in my time on this site.

Comment is about the poetess (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

But I like giraffes, why are there no giraffes?

Comment is about family (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

thing is ladies , you both know darn well that isnt who i am , it might be who i aspire to be :) but its not how it is
yes chris , you are right tent :)

Comment is about BIG DIAMONDS (blog)

Original item by Shoeless Carole

Lol - I think I've met him.
Croutonic? A little square and crusty? Floats in soup?
Cx

Comment is about human being (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

You've changed your tent - you need more diamonds for a tent than a tit ... well perhaps not in my case ... I don't own a tent. :)
Love it.
Cx

Comment is about BIG DIAMONDS (blog)

Original item by Shoeless Carole

Really like this - fourth verse particularly! though maybe take out the quotation marks and she says?
Well done.
Cx

Comment is about the poetess (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I really like this, agree with Graham, very charming. I can also identify (if you swop the shes & hers to hes and his), which I guess most of us can at some time or other.
Well done.
Cx

Comment is about I Wrote A Poem... (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

Hi Isobel,
Thanks for your comments on 'Play Me', glad you liked it.
I've never tried a didgeridoo ... I don't think I'd be able to blow one, I prefer something much smaller and with a little more sophistication to it - like my clarinet. I agree though that finishing on a diminuendo is lovely.
:)
Cx

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Hi Ann,
Thanks for your very generous comments on 'Play Me' - you're up the right tree, so to speak, though - no, sadly, no lover present.
You should definitely post yours! - I love Sheherezade! :)
Cx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Andy - thanks for your comments on 'Play Me' - glad you liked it. Perform it live! ... I think I'd be way too embarrassed! I have only managed to perform one of my own live so far, and that was with Paul & Winston's support - utterly nerve-wracking!
Cx

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Hi Larisa, Thank-you very much for your kind comments on 'Play Me'.
Cx

Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

every time I make love it's a haiku these days....

Comment is about the poetess (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Sounds like you've got your priorities right LOL - if he has a brother, do introduce me!

Comment is about BIG DIAMONDS (blog)

Original item by Shoeless Carole

And does he wear his hair long and let it all blow in the wind?

A quirky little poem Dave - I like the ending - there's more to all of us once you look inside.

Comment is about human being (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

I love this Ann - all of it. You pretty much sum us female poets up - we love with body and soul - and words are just so important.

The ending is perfect!

Comment is about the poetess (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

This may be better without the third and forth verses. But as I hate making decisions I left them in! Maybe because they make her seem like a real person I wanted to keep them in there. xx

Comment is about the poetess (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Ah yes! All that you say is true! And I love the first verse. A poem on it's own. x

Comment is about human being (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Thanks for commenting on Family. xx

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Can but agree with the others. Outstanding

Comment is about Bad Faith (blog)

Hi there - thanks for the very kind comments on the last two - it's much appreciated. all the best. B

Comment is about Nash (poet profile)

Original item by Nash

Loved this Dave. I've always thought it better not to show people the picture on the box.

Comment is about Jigsaw (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley