These prior comments are fulsome, and worthy. I think 'fault' is used like 'fault line' where lava/fire/disruptive emotion break through the earth/conscious restraints. The beauty of your work is symbolism which is free game, so to speak.

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thank you all xxx

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This is really good, Kath. Symbolically, I actually thought of the apostle, John, in his exile, trying to assimilate and reteach the tenets of Jesus of Nazareth. Words are so loaded with the reader's own experience.

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What a powerful subject, brilliantly highlighted here. I find the 'rib mythology' absolutely appalling, and can hardly believe it still exists - oh so strongly - in some arenas. I love how clear this is, smashing glass all the way.

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Original item by Marianne Daniels

Hi Marianne - I really enjoyed reading this; it actually 'feels' poetic, with its classic sense of morosity.

I'm with Ray though with the line -

"the fault of emotion bleeding monarchs of madness in their minds"

cf. 'emotion's fault, bleeding madness of monarchs in their minds'.

It's less demanding to imagine someone 'bleeding madness' than it is 'bleeding monarchs' - it just depends which noun you wish to modify.

I enjoy your writing - there is something there that appeals to me.

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Original item by Marianne Daniels

I find this such a sad brave poem Rosemary. But your inner Goddess is so strong! I see you wrote this in 2005 - you are still here writing poetry which is both great and true. Good for you! Much love AF xx

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Yes - I like this one. Sometimes it isn't a question of a dagger in the heart - just a little hurt. Sometimes it isn't a question of life and death issues - just common courtesy...this strikes a chord for me.

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LOL - that's another reason I liked the poem! You are far more subtle than me Kath! The change becomes her well...

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Original item by Kath Hewitt

I bet Steven King was inspired by the bible, as was Tolkien. I think much of literature is rooted in myth or religion, time honoured allusion... glad to hear it wasn't Blackpool LOL x

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I fankoo xxx

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:)

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ooo masood x

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i love this poem. it echoes my feelings entirely on the subject of all this supposed beauty in silence and these platitudes that really just fail to acknowledge a persons suffering and attempt to make it right with trite observations. and we know all too well when a person doent speak to you its becuse they just dont want to and will use any cleverness to excuse that to avoid responsiblity for their non-action.
you have put it beautifully x

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Sounds to me like you have given Pandora a sex change Kath! Good poem, as usual! x

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Original item by Kath Hewitt

Hi Andy,
thanks again for reading and commenting. I had toyed with different ways of splitting but couldn't decide so in the end it stayed as it is - as per lol x

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Original item by Andy N

Hi, Definately not blackpool!! It was actually inspired by Stephen King's Dark Tower series of novels. I wanted to try to stay away from the actual Pandoras box, yet keep the meaning? Hopefully i pulled it off!
Thanks for taking time to read and comment xx

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I enjoyed reading this one Kath. My R.E. isn't great so I googled the tower of Babylon, assuming that might be the one you are referring to. It represented man's vanity, trying to compete with the Gods, bringing the wrath of God upon man, scattering them across the world, splintering races. With that knowledge I find your poem easier to understand. I enjoyed your take on it. Now please don't tell me it has anything to do with Blackpool!

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Original item by Kath Hewitt

Could this be Pandora part 2? I love the ideas in it - second hand flesh, a waste of bone, a clone, bloated up by my lack of... you say it all very eloquently.

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Original item by Marianne Daniels

I wasn't criticising the ending Marianne - just commenting on the irony that hope should be the clinching evil - it's the paradox that lends the poem pathos and makes it stand out. As artists, we all reflect our moods in poetry - don't know about you, but I can from go from one extreme to the other in a day or a month...
Don't feel any need to bang a big base drum just on my account. x

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Original item by Marianne Daniels

Hi Ann, I think the running order for Women of the World is fine; I'm surprised you haven't had more comments. Funnily enough, the last poem I posted was the first one that I had written for more than 30 years!

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

he who rides the pale horse is often no where to be seen x

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Original item by Kath Hewitt

great...love the snake image like its passage causes a carving in stone you could imagine like a fossil..'etches its path forever more..stories of history hidden beneath.'
smashing :)

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Original item by Kath Hewitt

i love your writing kath, it paints some very sensual and expansive picture...

this is my fav. of the pandoras box series x

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Original item by Kath Hewitt

thankyou for the comments, I am considering ptting up an audio as soon as i can get my hands on a device to record.
isobel - i shall try to write a more optimistic poem in the future...

marianne

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Original item by Marianne Daniels

this is lovely... i bet this would go down really well in a live atomsphere.. i think it could nearly work as a song too.

good stuff..

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feel like there is a song like quality to this in places... the first seven or so stanzas all would be performed lovely in a open mike also.. the 8th and 9th stanzas however would leave me totally out of breathe! lol

Enjoyed this however. nice one

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enjoyed this, kath... i would have being tempted - i must admit to break this poem up a bit more for example on the second to last stanza breaking up the last two lines so it reads..

The gift of life,

renewal,

the gift of hope.

I did really enjoy this otherwise.. nice one! x

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Original item by Kath Hewitt

Hi Greg - thanks for the nice comment on Women of the World. It was one of the first poems I wrote, last autumn. I've got a soft spot for it and somehow the Pandora stuff on WOL recently brought it to mind. I wonder if it would work better if I changed their "running order" though?

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Original item by Greg Freeman

Hi Greg - thanks for the comment! This is one of the first poems I wrote, last autumn. I've got a soft spot for it and somehow the Pandora stuff on WOL recently brought it to mind. I wonder if it would work better if I changed their "running order" though?

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thank-you Dave, for your kind comment on 'Disconnected', much appreciated.
Cx

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Thanks Anthony for your very generous comments on 'Pandora's Box', they are very much appreciated.
No, you didn't comment on it before, previously I posted it just for a short while, then took it down again because I didn't think it was good enough, but kind comments from Isobel persuaded me to put it back. Glad you liked it.
Cx

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Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Good evening Lynn-just read'I thought of you'-beautiful!I love the honesty in your poems.I,m having break travelling the east coast this week-no tears(or shouting hurrah! lol!)hope there are some more of your delightful poems to read when I return-thank you-Stefan.

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Original item by Lynn Dye

Isobel.The reality TV stuff at the end is just thrown in for more cheap laughs.This is just number 1 in a 392- part series on the wonderful history of mental illness. Some of it is even true!Trepanation is the first known treatment of madness, a primitive form of lobotomy - as if lobotomy weren't primitive enough.

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Fascinating chain of thought. For me the whole poem is a build up to the last four lines - a poke at mind numbing reality tv shows like Big Brother and its ilk...or so I interpreted it.

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Hello Marianne. Some very powerful and vivid phrases, I loved "no longer a person but a country you evacuate".But "the fault of emotion bleeding monarchs of madness" maybe asks a bit too much of the reader?This reader, anyhow!

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Original item by Marianne Daniels

what writers work does this comment on? as it is without direct reference it reads bitter.for my sympathies youd have to explain yourself as these 'writers' may have good reason in their poetry. perhaps you dont understand it? its not a good idea to impose a solitary understanding of what a multi- interpretive word such as God is, upon a piece of work intended to reach a wide readership like poetry does.

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Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Isobel - thanks for the comments. "grasping at straws" - about the nuances of words/phrases & the different ways in which they can be employed. & - the ampersand works for me on the page only because sometimes to repeat the word AND becomes a little tedious to the eye, and like it says in my bio, I much prefer the written word, so it needs to look "right" on the page for me. Each to their own though and I can well understand what you mean. You always have something interesting to say! all the best. B

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I think language has a lot to answer for; it can become so esoteric it is a hindrance to real communication rather than a help. In my opinion, it is especially useless when writers/speakers don't really think about what the words really mean, and just 'spout', using all kinds of rhetorical skill to influence other people, all the time being on very unsure ground themselves. 'God/gods' can be the epitome of good or evil. Funny that. I took the slant of 'god/good' (still a matter of opinion!)

Not to worry, I'm not positive I had a point! HAHA. Pandora's 'lesson' can take you anywhere.

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Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I understand where you are coming from on this ; )

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Thanks Cate

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Original item by Nash

Thanks Cate - check out Every Day You Play!

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Original item by Nash

Hi Isobel, thanks for commenting on 'Dead End'. I haven't come across 'The Rapture' but a quick google gave me the jist - Climate change is an old interest of mine, I started a web magazine on the topic in '07. Best wishes, Dave

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Original item by Isobel

Greetings.
Thank you so much for attending the lecture, "The Power of the Elder". It was truly inspirational.
OL.

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Good afternoon Mrs Dye-just popped on to say hope you are well and enjoying the lovely weather(and ice cream! lol)best regards-Stefan.

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Original item by Lynn Dye

Afternoon Dave and family.Re your comment on on lottery numbers-drat! foiled again!lol-hope your weekend goes just as great-cheers-Stefan.

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Original item by Dave Dunn

Anthony, Zeus was so devious,he knew just what would happen. After all he masterminded the plot.LOL

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Original item by Valerie Cook

I think the woman in the cave has the best deal! Enjoyed this, Ann, full of ideas, expansive

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Isobel, Sorry, i wont be attending on tuesday, lack of babysitter. I'm sure we'll meet eventually! Thanks for asking though, it's quite a nice feeling to know i'm wanted lol x

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Original item by Isobel

Cate, thanks for your comments on my poems.That's just the kind of criticism I like to hear.If I were more skilful I'd be able to blend poetry into the narrative seamlessly, but as you say, it's too prosaic in parts.

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You aren't by any chance going to the Vanilla Lounge on Tuesday? It sounds like a few Wigan poets may be there. I'm determined to meet you one day! x

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