I love it! And I did think it was about a suicuide, i enjoyed the slow verbs you've used which give the impression of her gradually sinking in which is why I thought it was suicide I think, ace and sad and i'll send you a link to another poem by Gillian Clarke which this reminds me of. :)

Comment is about The girl and the lake (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

Don't know the poet but I love the sounds and I like to read the occasional love poem. You should try recording it.

Comment is about Puedo Escribir (tonight I can write) (blog)

Original item by Nash

Hi Andy - thanks for your comment, glad you enjoyed it. I am trying not to comment too much on any of the other Pandora poems, as I want to include my thoughts in the end summary. I also didn't want to be influenced by other's thoughts whilst writing. I have enjoyed yours though and am so glad that you took part. What has been great about this competition is the community spirit I feel in the air. Great poets getting together to have some fun. It's not every day things like that happen...

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Thank you again, Ann

Comment is about Stargiver (blog)

Original item by Nash

I dreamt of delusions sometimes myself still and I am older than I will admit... I think we all do to some degree when we are 15..

I loved this.. nicely structured, chuck.. x

Comment is about Delusions. (blog)

Thanks Greg - ah, the good old days of being terrified of girls. If I could go back - I'd tell myself to hang onto that fear!

Comment is about BACK-SEAT BRENDA (blog)

Original item by Nash

i write about silence too sometimes and look into the gaps inbetween it... the things you may miss if you don't look carefully..

i could really relate to this - your best one on here yet, I felt..

Comment is about Silence (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

nice one Cynthia. good stuff! x

Comment is about Pandora's Box (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Love these lines ...

"Concealing my growing admiration
For that High-school crest
Displayed magnanimously on her heaving chest"

Brought back memories of the school bus, after all these years ...

Comment is about BACK-SEAT BRENDA (blog)

Original item by Nash

hey i voted x

Comment is about VOTE FOR ME!!!! (PRETTY PLEASE) (blog)

Original item by Gemma Lees

Hi Andy - sorry I couldn't chat. Was in middle of trying to sort out audio on my poem. I hate rushing poetry - too many loose ends, things I don't really like. Ended up changing it and then it didn't tie up to the recording. It won't seem to take the new recording though. Blast and double blast - that will teach me to rush things...

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

I like this one! Esp. those first three lines - and the last bit (after "Then suddenly; Light") is particularly lovely too.

Comment is about Stargiver (blog)

Original item by Nash

Liked these lines very much:Spinning made me
and I spin still.
Smoothed thumb and finger
and wet earth
from honest mud.
That was my birth.
The gods made me to carry the can.
Poor womankind, to get the blame from man.
Though you could probably omit "from honest mud" same as wet earth, really!

Comment is about pandora's jar (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thanks Lynn! that one is ooold!

Comment is about THE TOAD THE HEART AND THE VALENTINE GIFT (blog)

Original item by Nash

This is beautiful!

Comment is about marshmallow (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Enjoyed this, Nash. Made me smile.

Comment is about THE TOAD THE HEART AND THE VALENTINE GIFT (blog)

Original item by Nash

Thank you, dear Lynn for your comments.
With warmest wishes, Larisa

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thank you, dear Lynn.

Comment is about Silence (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Another nod (ok, ok it's a total rip off!) to the greatest poet that ever lived - Pablo Neruda

Comment is about Puedo Escribir (tonight I can write) (blog)

Original item by Nash

J'ai voté pour toi : )
Bonne chance !

Comment is about VOTE FOR ME!!!! (PRETTY PLEASE) (blog)

Original item by Gemma Lees

A lovely poem, Larissa, with a lot of truth in there.

Comment is about Silence (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

One always needs a good duvet, Ann. Always!

Comment is about Online Love (for Jen Lewis) (blog)

Original item by Nash

Thank you Francine - I haven't performed in 8 years and am weaning my way back slowly. An audio may be a good place to start. I'll try to figure out the technicalities as I'm all too new to this. Glad you found it funny though! Always a good thing. Nash

Comment is about Online Love (for Jen Lewis) (blog)

Original item by Nash

I keep thinking it's called Online Love (for John Lewis). Maybe you are desiring of some frying pans Nash, or a nice duvet! ;-)

Comment is about Online Love (for Jen Lewis) (blog)

Original item by Nash

We need more jam! This is April jam! If no one else volunteers I'm doin it again! (And we don't want that do we!);-)

Comment is about Death Wish (article)

This is so funny! It flows really well, and would sound brilliant
performed - you should do an audio of this!
I love the comments you make to yourself in parenthesis too.

Comment is about Online Love (for Jen Lewis) (blog)

Original item by Nash

TC, thanks for your excellent observation. My prior comment was obtuse; so I axed it. Your remarks are in themselves very apt for us all.

Comment is about Pandora's Box (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hell Andy. Liked the first two verses very much, the dominoes thing is fine, maybe "on" the nearby coastline?3rd verse I think you could end at "struggle to contain". 4th verse, how about:trying to impersonate Greek goddesses, in reality loking more like The Gorgons?I think it tails off a bit toward the end, but an interesting read, much enjoyed.

Comment is about Pandora's lost Box (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Hello Dave, many thanks for your kind comments on both the Pandora thing and my previous stuff. Just read your Haiku. Love the middle line especially.

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Thanks chaps!

Chris: alternative poetry was always my aim in my youth. So, proud about your comments, thanks.

Isobel: you have no idea how much that is watered down from the reality of some of the things I have been approached with since entering into singledom!

Much love to you both, Nash

Comment is about Online Love (for Jen Lewis) (blog)

Original item by Nash

This made me laugh! I know a number of people who've tried on line dating agencies. It is quite common place for people to wipe 5-10 years off their age and post pictures taken 20 years ago - much like WOL really - why do you think I stick with a wine bottle?

Comment is about Online Love (for Jen Lewis) (blog)

Original item by Nash

Re your comment on Pandora's Box -you are getting me worried Andy!

The competition is just a bit of fun - not to be taken too seriously. I am fascinated by how one theme can be developed so differently by so many. All of the poems reflect beautifully the personalities and stlyes of the poets. How does one compare apples and pears? The more I think about it, the less I want to be the judge...

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Well for me this is the Panodra's box of poetry. You start to write a piece and it turn's out completely different than intended, taken in this context it is a total success.
TC X

Comment is about Pandora's Box (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Brilliant! this paints a vivid picture to the minds eye, to me always a sign of successful piece of work.TC

Comment is about Pandora's lost Box (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Good stuff Dave, I can't write Haiku either, Loved the centre line. Thank you for your kind comment too.
TC

Comment is about Pandora haiku (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

I like this, it is one of the more traditional takes on the theme, and refreshing in presentation.
TC

Comment is about Pandora`s Legacy (blog)

Original item by Valerie Cook

You cunt run that by me again could you? Love the humour. Am trying not to read too many in case I get influenced - but I don't think I could produce anything like this - I'm far too angry and scornful!

Comment is about A Yukon Tale . . . (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Can,t do Dave-you see I,m a member of rage concern-haha(and that-IS-a joke.But I am a trick cyclist(shh!)heading your way-where are you? all I can see is an empty crisp bag and a half full(half empty-positivity there-haha!)bottle of Navy rum.Are you lying down-in another darkened room-lol! cheers funster-Stef.

Comment is about Dave Dunn (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Dunn

hi steve...just got your message about mc ing at liverpoetry. yes id be happy to do that if the offer is still there...x

Comment is about Steve Regan (poet profile)

Original item by Steve Regan

Thanks Isobel for commenting on 'The Angry Man' - I'm currently baffling him with polite responses, lol.

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Hi Isobel - I penned this one as a response to the actions of a guy on one of the social networks.

Comment is about The Angry Man (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

An interesting one Dave. Respect for others and their opinions, however different, is a biggie, a real biggie.

Comment is about The Angry Man (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Gershon Thomas, thank you. People rarely take time to read and you have, despite all else, my stories proceeded from there. I have no regrets, the pen is mightier than the sword, more power to the muscle

Comment is about Emmanuel Sairosi (poet profile)

Original item by Emmanuel Sairosi

Who said that! haha(re you computerising in the shade)Good morning Dave and family.Enjoy your day.Have you been onto age concern for free lightbulbs? hee..hee..catch you later pater-Stefan.

Comment is about Dave Dunn (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Dunn

My Brother, My friend, what a blessing to have met and fellowshipped with you.
My heart weeps for the pain inflicted upon yours and so many others by our people of South Africa.
“umuntu ngumuntu ngabantu”(a person is a person through other persons)
& I am that person because of you my brother.

"When The Power of Love, Overcomes The Love of Power...Then The World Will Know Peace" Jimi Hendrix

Comment is about Emmanuel Sairosi (poet profile)

Original item by Emmanuel Sairosi

I agree with banksy.
the first verse is really powerful..x

Comment is about Pandora`s Box (blog)

Original item by Cate

I love your voice! And I read that it was a jar too.

Maybe hope is a nasty pastie - it is just prolonging humankind's torment...

great poem ann! x

Comment is about pandora's jar (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I love the line
"they will return to everyday life like
a pair of over stuffed vampires," and in fact what follows this is brilliant.
That painting is brilliant - is there any way to see mor eof her work?

Comment is about Pandora's lost Box (blog)

Original item by Andy N

cute!

Comment is about Love floating high over all (blog)

Original item by Josh Coates

I love this Josh. You have such a fresh clear voice. Hope you keep posting. (Have you heard of a book called Submarine by Joe Dunthorne? I think you'd like it. He's a poet too. Somehow this poem of yours reminded me of the book.)

Comment is about Why God Why? (blog)

Original item by Josh Coates