has a really soft sound to it, cat which i really enjoyed.. i bet in the right atomsphere this would go down really well..
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good stuff, steven - the ending is particularly strong i felt but i enjoyed the full piece..
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nice, kealan.. could be a song there if you had carried it but i really enjoyed this...
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nice, Dave.. always struggle with haiku's myself but admire you for doing it..
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<Deleted User> (7212)
Thu 20th May 2010 07:52
Hi Isobel, P.Box-I've copied this to you just to make sure you see it. B
Hi - thanks to all for your comments & just to answer some in order:
if Chris thinks this was a dig at Isobel I can say 100% that it was not a dig at anyone - Isobel & I had had some good-natured banter, but as far as I can see, that was all. Same for Isobel herself & her brother TC (I didn't know BTW) - there was no "motivation" - it was just a poem which almost wrote itself, as many do. The catalyst for the poem was Gropecuntelane - a common street name right across the UK as frequented by prostitutes until most got renamed for "decency's sake". One remains in Southwark & one of the newspapers - Guardian, I think - had a picture of the nameplate still on the wall down some backstreet by a block of flats a while back & the name stuck in my mind - can't think why.
Nash - the mighty Nash - got it right -it's a love poem & it says so in the last 2 lines.
Just to reiterate - I've no axe to grind with anyone - dedicating a recent poem to Isobel was just for a laugh - nothing sinister - and I'd hoped it would be seen as such. TTFN. B.
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<Deleted User> (7212)
Thu 20th May 2010 07:47
Hi Dave - yes, I can see your point entirely - I suppose I'm just writing about something that has a "spark" for me & hopefully some others "get it" as well. But if it's not to everyone's taste, that's to be expected. I only dedicated the poem to Isobel as we had had some banter going on, but nothing more sinister. all the best. B
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I like this too Cate. That air of expectancy well captured!
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Reminds me of that wonderful film The Treasure of the Seirra Madre. (Might have spelt it wrong. Humphrey Bogart was in it. And Tim something - he was great.)
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Ore-ful!
(brilliant actually)
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Yu kon artist, you!
;-)
Cx
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<Deleted User> (7073)
Thu 20th May 2010 02:32
Uneasy in its desolation this poem Steven although well crafted , it is hard to contemplate the total absence of hope in the world, I note your particular Pandora's box has the Horned Devil on it!!
TC
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Bienvenue à WOL Josh...
Thank you so much for your lovely comment on my poem
'Is it not enough...'
Writing it was quite cathartic ; )
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This is wonderful Gus... I feel as though all of my senses are at play here.
I especially love the first and last verses.
xxx
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I really like this, Cate. You truly feel the awe of the moment.
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<Deleted User> (7212)
Wed 19th May 2010 23:43
I think this is really very good. I know it was your not intention, but to me, the first verse could easily stand as an excellent poem in it's own right. B
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<Deleted User> (7073)
Wed 19th May 2010 23:26
Brilliant Cate, I love the cadence the words the meaning, in fact all of it.
Love TC XXXXX
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Wed 19th May 2010 23:17
where are you Dave? someone has put sunglasses on the camera! lol!Stef.
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Another rebel changing the title! I won't comment on the poem cos I'm trying not to until I do my big resume (accent on the e). Was reminded of one of my dad's old jokes. When is a door not a door? A. When it's a jam jar.
Groan, groan. x
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darren thomas
Wed 19th May 2010 20:58
Hi Kenny - you're using a colourful lexicon in your work - and the last line, although simple, has resonance.
Nice one.
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Wed 19th May 2010 20:52
Hi - Banksy - Pandora's Box -
Nash - the mighty Nash - got it right -it's a love poem. sorry to piss on your chips if you wanted first go at this theme, but I'll look forward to seeing your own. all the best. B
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Wed 19th May 2010 20:26
Hi Dave - "St johns in the Vale" = a lovely place to camp as I have done many times (despite the midges !) I cant think of a better place to be on a summers evening than outside the pub Kings Arms ? just up the road with a pint or three of what-you-fancy. I'm glad you liked the poem. As for other subject matter - well, as it says in my bio I like to write about all sorts - Nazis, paedos, death, perversion, love, corny stuff, cliched stuff, nature, etc etc. For me, it doesn't always have to be the nice stuff to be able to gain a degree of satisfaction in writing or reading the darker stuff as well. Some folks like Hello magazine & others like Pepys. Just my 2 cents. all the best. B
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(Re Pandora) Gus! Pasties aren't nasty! How very dare you! (Speaking as an inhabitant of Kurnow.) But I wondered that too. All Greek to me! And I like your poem.
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Gus! Pasties aren't nasty! How very dare you! (Speaking as an inhabitant of Kurnow.) But I wondered that too. All Greek to me!
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But then you have to take the dusty old jar out from under the bed and spread all that hope about! Good clear poem - well done ;-)
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If Hope was left within the box... what was it doing locked up with all the 'nastie pastie stuff in the first place.
... Mmmmm
Good poem, liked your reading voice very much too.
Gus x
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Thanks TC - genuinely lovely comment! Nash
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<Deleted User> (7073)
Wed 19th May 2010 18:18
Yes we have all peeked into this particular version of Pandora's box ha ha I guess we all have it coming huh? Interesting take on the subject.
TC ;-)
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Wed 19th May 2010 18:08
I have never seen this before I am glad you re-posted it, really enjoyed it, reminds me of some Arcane Wizards retreat, maybe the Unseen University. I liked the imagery of the last verse particularly ;-)
TC
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<Deleted User> (7073)
Wed 19th May 2010 18:02
Letting go of hate is always a good thing, but not always so easy to do, Lets hope this ray of light from Pandora's box spreads throughout WOL.
TC
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<Deleted User> (7073)
Wed 19th May 2010 17:59
There is powerful imagery at work here, Apocalyptic in deed in it's message to us mere men ;-)
TC
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<Deleted User> (7073)
Wed 19th May 2010 17:55
Well it is really good I have joined in with the spirit too... yes all you Pandora's are to blame ha ha
TC XXXX
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Wed 19th May 2010 17:40
ah Dave! you had to practice? and heres me thinking it being highly likely you were a natural born lover-oh no can,t be-thats me! lol lovely picture-keep yer grubby mitts of it! cheers big fella-and the lovely Fran and all(including Uncle Tom Cobbley)-Stefan.
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Hi Ann - liking your new photo :) Best wishes
Dave
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I expect I'll be disqualified now - calling it a jar an' all. But it was originally a jar not a box I read somewhere. My attempt at rhyming gets a bit lost somewhere in the middle. May redo. But is feels like a race! Great fun it is too!
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Hi Cynthia
Well it seemed a good idea... took it out , dusted it off, a little reworking...
Just some encouragement ... can't win me own cake now can I.
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Hi Cynthia
Well it seemed a good idea... took it out , dusted it off, a little reworking...
Just some encouragement ... can't win me own cake now can I.
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Got to get in quick round here mate! (re Pandora)
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Thankyou so much for the comments Ann!!
Take care x
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Hi Cate, Thanks for your comments on ';-P'. Yes some people are conjoined with their phones arn't they... they are worshiped objects for us as are those blackberry things. Are we missing something here? are people more interesting / important?
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Wow Marianne! A winner IMO! Wonderful. "training the lock like a tarot", "tipping apocalypse like petals" "Hope, lingering on a hinge". x
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Sharp and witty concept, with real poetic skills used in its presentation. I like it a lot.
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I am so glad you have re-posted this for new readers! I kinda wondered about doing the same, and actually trawled my own stuff yesterday with that idea 'a bit' in mind.
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<Deleted User> (7073)
Wed 19th May 2010 11:57
Oops I normaly call you Annipoo ha ha my wife's twin is called Anne so you see my fingers think they know how to spell better than me !! except the don't ha ha...TC XX
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This is so you Chris... love the reworking ...great sound and a great poem... well done as usual
Gus
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Always enjoy your work Chris, but this I REALLY like. Very sharp.
Well done
Cx
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I like this Alison, clever stuff. Lines 5-6 ... have you been spying?
;-)
Well done,
Cx
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Andy N
Thu 20th May 2010 08:16
nice stuff ann.. enjoyed this
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