Incidentally, I just read your samples and I'm afraid I can't help with you finding a man who can dance. I did this "short" some time ago:-

Mi verse, most times, is full of rhymes
(It helps wi’ mi romancin’)
And all my rhythm’s in mi poems –
There’s none left fo’ mi dancin’.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hello Ann
Many thanks for your comments about "Yggdrasil". I've never thought my voice was terribly impressive but thankyou anyway. Probably like everyone else I thought it was rich and deep - until I heard it on a tape recorder and then this this thin, flat timbre comes out!
I have to confess I got the idea for the poem from reading the Bernard Cornwell Saxon Chronicles - a ripping good boy's read with lots of battles and fighting and more fighting and battles. I even poach completely the line about "weaving a darker cloth" which stands out a mile for its quality compared with the rest.
Anyway, once again, thanks for commenting.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

i really like this one. the use of the scarecrows is very powerful. good stuff :)

Comment is about standing scarecrows (blog)

As I read it, you are married to one tiger and there is another rather tasty tiger after you. Lucky girl I say!!

Comment is about On The Other Side (blog)

Hello Fatima. Welcome to WOL. You've made a good impression already I see. Look forward to reading your work.

Comment is about Fatima AL Matar (poet profile)

Original item by Fatima AL Matar

intriguing and well written

Comment is about On The Other Side (blog)

This is remarkably fine writing Kathryn. I really like the analogy of scary scarecrows and your supposed personal failings. I am really pleased for you. Graham

Comment is about standing scarecrows (blog)

really enjoyed the rhythm in this write..goin for a cold shower now..!!!

Comment is about Piggies (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thanks Chris yeah am not three bad at the moment..fingers crossed and you?..What venues have we this week for I have lost touch of late..or just touched..now to the write..I had a dream and have looked tigers up on the dream dictionary..ooer..but I do like your interpretation.. again thanks for droppin by!..x

Comment is about On The Other Side (blog)

Yes, that was what had caught my eye - thanks!

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Ann - need your help again! I'd like to be featured and it says to submit profile, but when I hit that, it looks like I have to fill out my profile again. Will that create a duplicate? Thanks, as always, for helping me out.

Lisa

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Very well done Jan
Cx

Comment is about Tyne Cot (blog)

Original item by Jan Theuninck

This is really good. It keeps the reader seductively gripped all the way through. Diction, technical musicality and rhythm are strong. Have you been watching a lot of telly lately?

Comment is about Blood Ties (Part 2): Communion (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

hiya Dave,

Gosh she gave herself a hard time!
I guess in the end if one is going to self-destruct there is nothing anyone can do about it but are left with the emotional baggage of trying..just one nit and that was the 'and' in the last stanza it interupts the flow of your rhyme take it out and just use your comma.. :o)

Comment is about Release of the Chameleon (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Hi Gemma,
Loved My Grandma Painted Her Eyebrows On!It's brilliant when someone stands out from the norm!

Comment is about Gemma Lees (poet profile)

Original item by Gemma Lees

I'm sure Dylan would have enjoyed this poem hugely! And the bottoms!!

Comment is about Do Not Bend Forward... (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

Cynthia - I've sent you a You Tube link to the original. Thanks for all the comments especially from those with the surname Thomas. I should have put an apology to Dylan Thomas. I love the original. No offence intended.

Comment is about Do Not Bend Forward... (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

I'm glad you enjoyed 'Contraception' Ann. I was feeling quite self consious about my audio recordings but I'm very happy that you liked those too :)

Comment is about Fatima AL Matar (poet profile)

Original item by Fatima AL Matar

Hi Fatima, I agree with Chris, the description of the sucking sound like a snail being unstuck is brilliant. I listened to your readings too, you have a lovely voice. I particularly like When Silence has Sound. All very haunting stuff.

Comment is about Fatima AL Matar (poet profile)

Original item by Fatima AL Matar

I really like the way you read - you have a great voice, lovely accent too. Nice poem!

Comment is about Yggdrasil (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Oh god Stef! Now everyone will think you're my son!! (The shame, the shame!) ;-)

Comment is about mothers' day (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I like this Ray. You sound both loving and amused by your small daughter. And I'm sure this is the second poem in recent days to have the word emoticonic in it (and I still don't know what it means!)

Comment is about Lilyism (blog)

Thank you darlings - loved the cards

mumxx

Comment is about mothers' day (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Ditto!!!!! ; )

Comment is about The Argument (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thank you Chris,

Yes I did read a few months back in Earlsdon, thanks you for remembering me.
Fatima xx

Comment is about Fatima AL Matar (poet profile)

Original item by Fatima AL Matar

I'm like Janet.. I certainly will! (proper rebel without a cause) lol xx

Comment is about The Argument (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Very moving piece of work Fatima, very well written. Look forward to reading more of your work.
Did I hear you read a few months ago in Earlsdon?
Cx

Comment is about Fatima AL Matar (poet profile)

Original item by Fatima AL Matar

Thanks for commenting on my poem, Ann, much appreciated.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

No, Janet, not about a cat, but my daughter, who has a habit of talking about herself in the third person, as in:Lily would like her pocket money and Lily would like to stay out until 10.30. OK?Thanks for the response.

Comment is about Lilyism (blog)

Thank you for commenting on my foxy haiku! No wheelie bins where I live (thank goodness) but we do use bunjees! And I don't live on a street, but a little row of cottages up a hill. And actually, it's badgers! Too many syllables in badgers!

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

No wheelie bins (thank goodness) but we do use bunjees! And I don't live on a street, but a little row of cottages up a hill. And actually, it's badgers! Too many syllables in badgers!

Comment is about trash (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Dylan Thomas indeed - and that's what you got when Dave read it at The Tudor the other night. Great stuff. Instantly recognisable. My only 'criticism' now is that I'll not be able to read DT's version again without thinking of tight jeans!

Comment is about Do Not Bend Forward... (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

have you ever read imatiaz dharkers poem you remind of me her style of poetry i can't believe no one commented until now!

Comment is about Automaton (blog)

I like the first part the river of death the imagery is good in all the poems

Comment is about World Out of Blame (blog)

Cynthia - 'Do not go gentle in to that goodnight...' was what I got from it anyway.
Very clever stuff.
Cx

Comment is about Do Not Bend Forward... (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

This is really good, in every poetic sense. I found 'the mind is a Saturday morning church hall blur of dusty heaps and hopes' an interestingly ambiguous metaphor.

Comment is about A bad night (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

This rhyme scheme is very 'tight'; 19 lines and only 2 end rhymes, quite a feat, even with line repetition. Is this a special form which I just don't remember? Also, is this a piece of 'pastiche', given Christine's reference to Mr. T? Please clue me in; I'm interested.

Comment is about Do Not Bend Forward... (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

Hi Rodney,
I quite like the idea behind this. I think you could do a better job of it though if you don't mind my saying.

Too much at the end of it for me. I think you could omit the last two lines and maybe end it on 'But no, i lost my appetite for heroes.'

Just a thought,
Janet.x

Comment is about HYMN TO A BROKEN MARRIAGE (blog)

Original item by Rodney Wood

Good question Cynthia. ha ha

I used to rinse 'em back down the plug hole with hot water in the hope they would shrivel up and die.
Now i ask them to leave via the way they came in the time it takes for me to walk out the room and back in again.
Works almost every time.
Some are a bit more stubborn so i have to insist. :-)

Janet.x

Comment is about plug hole (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Oh yes i will!
Especially if you dare me to or tell me not to. :-)

Janet.x

Comment is about The Argument (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

There's something about this i can't quite put my finger on.
I do love the images but i felt as though Lily is a cat in places and i can't make up my mind if it was intentional and maybe, just maybe my comment is observing the authors observations?

Intrigued,
Janet.x

Comment is about Lilyism (blog)

How to sleep. How indeed. Or why when you can produce a poem while in the throes of a moment of uninterrupted peace?

Nice poem,
Janet.x

Comment is about A bad night (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Yay, thanks for posting this Dave.
I remember your performance of this at the Tudor too. It was great and came across with light humour and good natured.
It is clever, i agree.

Janet.x

Comment is about Do Not Bend Forward... (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

Phew! This seems to pack a punch.
Quite disturbing to find another and then another facet to a human psyche or human trait which comes unexpectedly and shocks.
I think this is saying 'give me stability any day. I can choose peace rather than this.'

Great poem,
Janet.x

Comment is about Release of the Chameleon (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Hi Ann,
yeah, i drive a taxi. :-)

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

good images Dave.Lost thoughts found in meditation.Steve Smith

Comment is about A bad night (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Excellent, funny haiku, Ann. Knew it wouldn't be that dark down your end of the street. But don't you have wheelie bins down your way?

Comment is about trash (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I like this too, Dave. Lots of recognisable images that fit in well with the theme. I also like the fact that the first two comments on your poem were apparently posted at 3.41am and 6.28am today! Greg

Comment is about A bad night (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

I like this very much, very clever - I'm sure Mr T would've appreciated it too.
Cx

Comment is about Do Not Bend Forward... (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

Was somebody bending over the freezer counter, by any chance?

This is a super performance poem Dave. It went down so well at the Tudor and I forgot to mention it on discussion. It is hard to do humour but you do it so well and bring a nice breath of fresh air with it. I'm trying to cut down on my WOL involvement this month but it's not proving easy. Just couldn't resist commenting. x

Comment is about Do Not Bend Forward... (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr