For me, Thomas, this is more of an indulgent poem. Would you consider pruning out one third to a half of it? So much is so good. I offer this comment sincerely, because you have much of value to share. It is only my opinion which can be tossed in the bin naturally; but! would you try it? I'm itching to know what you would do.
Comment is about Age of Invention (blog)
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You know how I admire your thinking and the expression of it. I believe all you needed to say in this poem is in the first verse which is rich enough to stand alone.
Comment is about Adrienne (blog)
Original item by Tom
It's one of the most sensual areas of the body, like the palm of the hand; funny that, the obvious and the super-shielded. This is a beguiling piece.
Comment is about the back of my knee (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
I must admit - I'm not overly fond of long locks on an aging man or woman LOL but whatever does it for you Dave! On your head be it. A fun poem, celebrating the need to determine one's own life - be it back hair or head hair - the choice is yours... I can identify with this. x
Comment is about Wild and woolly (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Hi Beula, thanks for taking the time to comment on If I Could. I was trying to make the point that everyone has the right to make their own choices in life whether they be right or wrong. Its so easy to try to protect those you love, but in the end you cant live their lives for them.
Cate xx
Comment is about Beulah (poet profile)
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Hi Anthony, thanks for your lovely comment on If I could. Much appreciated.
Cate xx
Comment is about Antony Owen (poet profile)
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Hi Winston, many thanks for your lovely comment on If I could. Much appreciated.
Cate xx
Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)
Original item by Winston Plowes
Hi Rachel, sos Ive only just got round to thanking you for your lovely comment on my last poem... Ive had a horrid bug which has laid me up for the last few days. How amazing that you wrote your poem when you did.. like you say great minds!!!!! Although truth to tell theres nothing really new, just our own interpretation of how we see things. Sometimes something we read of others inspires us to write in a similar vein. I know this happened to me with the first poem I ever put up here called "My Little red haired laddie" {still one of my favourites} A poet called Nabila, dont think you ll remember her, shes left the site now, wrote a beautiful poem called "Green Eyes" about a family gene in Afghanistan which produced green eyes. It got me thinking about hereditary, and my little grandsons red hair which came from celtic ancestors generations ago and inspired my favourite poem! Sos I cant say yours did cos I hadnt seen it!! {My psychic link doesnt run to telepathy!!! lol}
Cate xx
Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (poet profile)
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<Deleted User> (6292)
Tue 2nd Mar 2010 16:30
Yes I agree ... Knees must...
Love it Its very sensual.
Augusta x
Comment is about the back of my knee (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Chris
The Chaviad music is by Clint Mansell. It is a remix of a track called 'Requiem for a Dream', which is used in the cult movie of the same name. He has composed a lot of Hollywood film scores, but this is his best.
A remarkable piece!
Comment is about J F Keane (poet profile)
Original item by J F Keane
Hi there,
Just heard 'Chaviad' on the poetry jukebox - absolutely loved it. Very inventive.
Can you tell me what the music you used is, please? I recognise it but can't place it.
Cx
Comment is about J F Keane (poet profile)
Original item by J F Keane
You grow that hair long Dave!! make a stand, think I may try dreads!! haha - retirement no excuse for me yet - maybe more mid-life crisis.xx
Comment is about Wild and woolly (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Hi Rachel, I have a problem with poem titles too. I sometimes don't hit on the right one for several years! I assumed with Protection Poem that it was an undercover job, so to speak, ie that you'd sent it off somewhere with another title and were disguising it here, as discussed recently on a thread. It's a long time since my kids were that age, but I can still identify with that fierce feeling. Good luck with the competitions and magazines. After a year with the comps I decided that mags were a better bet in view of the odds, publishing between 25-50 poems an issue, as opposed to 1st,2nd,3rd, and possibly ending up with nothing in print. There is the chance of cash with the competitions though, I agree! Greg
Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (poet profile)
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Tue 2nd Mar 2010 10:25
I love this Kathryn.And I love people who note the little things in life,which in a lot of cases are far more interesting.Thanks-Stefan.
Comment is about Dead Wasp (blog)
Hi M. That little fella is a cooling koala! Apparently there is some resemblance between him and I although I am at a loss to see it. See you soon. Win (Koala) XXX
Comment is about Marianne Daniels (poet profile)
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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 09:39
Hello Ann, how lovely of you to visit my page. Thank you for your lovely comments. I've just been reading your work and it's gorgeous! You have such a range from the wry to the pastoral, and all with a clarity and energy and lilt. Magnificent!
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Oh my goodness win, who is the little fella in the bucket?? That has lifted my sleepy spirits immensely this morning!! x
Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)
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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 09:22
Huge thanks, Beulah, for your enthusiasm and very kind comments. Yes, it's asemic verse -- fun to choose the individual faces in a crowd and then avoid them! And I love your poems. Powerful, song-like, sinuous!
Comment is about Beulah (poet profile)
Original item by Beulah
Hi Rach - yea, I got the point of your Elvis poem, but I'm sure you don't really look like him first thing in the morning. You shouldn't go to bed wearing the skin tight white leather trouser suite covered in rhinetstones! That's where you've come a cropper! Not sure who I look like when I get up - try not to look!
Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (poet profile)
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Hello Greg, thanks very much for commenting on my recentest blogs (oops, made up a word again)I'm very glad you enjoyed them, I will be thinking more about titles as it's something I have a bit of an issue with unless they jump at me, if you know what I mean. As for the young Elvis, God yes, he was absolutely something else.
Thanks again for taking the time to read and comment,
Rachel
xxx
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thank you ndy, for reading and commenting on my recent blog. Very glad you enjoyed it.
Rachel :)
x
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
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Hi jane, many thanks for commenting on my recent blog. Glad you liked it,
Rachel
xxx
Comment is about jane wilcock (poet profile)
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Hi Isobel, thanks for the comment. I'm playing catchup (a la Henry Kelly)with comments cos I have had scant computer time recently since Chris discovered Facebook (insert rolly eyed smiley here.) Very glad you enjoyed the poem.Rachelxxx
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Hiya Cate. Thank you for the comment on my protection poem. I wrote this at christmas and when I read your beautiful 'If I Could' it reminded me of it, so I went and found it in my notebook. I love that they are on the same theme....maybe we are on the same wavelength as Janet said earlier in the month. Glad you enjoyed it, I really loved yours.
Rachel
xxx
Comment is about Cate (poet profile)
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Hi Andy,
thanks for reading and making comment
steve x
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
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Hi JF, nice little poem, sounds like a good plan. welcome to the site.
Comment is about J F Keane (poet profile)
Original item by J F Keane
Thank you so much Cate for your wonderful comments on our poem 'Unstoppable'... Isobel and I had so much fun working on this : )
Francine x
p.s. Ha ha hemisphere vs continent ; )
Comment is about Cate (poet profile)
Original item by Cate
Thank you Beulah for your interesting comments on our poem 'Unstoppable'... Isobel and I had so much fun with this one : )
Francine x
p.s. I am looking forward to summer too ; )
Comment is about Beulah (poet profile)
Original item by Beulah
Lovely Rachel.....like Isobel says the style is so different and uniquely you.
Cate xx
Comment is about Protection Poem (blog)
Original item by Rachel McGladdery
You're lucky to have any!
I'm rapidly cultivating a sun-roof!
Comment is about Wild and woolly (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Hi Andy, Thanks for your comment on Night terrors. I think to be honest the line 'somewhere was there' is more of an affirmation than anything else. Kind of like, the person isn't sure until the light starts to shift? I think?!
Either way, glad you enjoyed reading it. x
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Hi Alain, Great to see you the other week - good work brother. Maybe I see you again there on the 17th. If not Ill see you soon in any case. Cheers
P
Comment is about Alain English (poet profile)
Original item by Alain English
well done. good.
Comment is about I Thought I Was Different (blog)
Original item by Dorinda MacDowell
Hi Danni, great to see you in the East End the other week - good work.
See you soon hope Pete x
Comment is about Danni Antagonist (poet profile)
Original item by Danni Antagonist
Welcome to WOL, hope you enjoy the site. Hope to see some of your poems here soon.
Comment is about J F Keane (poet profile)
Original item by J F Keane
Hi Antony, yes I did get your book thanks. I thought I'd emailed you ages ago, maybe I imagined it! I've been too busy lately to give it the time it deserves, so I'm looking forward to reading it asap. xx
Comment is about Antony Owen (poet profile)
Original item by Antony Owen
This is a thoughtful poem. I guess it is about reconciling yourself with some negative aspect of life. Being alone in nature works.
Don't worry about the facebook thing Cynthia:)
Comment is about Communion (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Hi Ann did you get the book okay?
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Isobel, thank you so much for your lovely message regarding the un-named poem. Im so glad you like it. I love the title suggestions thank you and will pich to call it "shelved" I think. Thankyou!
take care ~~~ em ~~~
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
By the way, such a gorgeous photograph. Makes my heart sing.
Comment is about Carol Falaki (poet profile)
Original item by Carol Falaki
Carol, thank you for the invitation to Facebook. I have declined only because I have declined everyone. I know extended acquaintances with some persons would be fabulous, but I have chosen, for now, not to be involved in this 'friendship channel'. I do 'chat' whenever I can.
Comment is about Carol Falaki (poet profile)
Original item by Carol Falaki
Much better,I think.
There is a huge market for children's poetry, ie. poetry for children. You should investigate this. You have a real talent for the beautifully simple, and the simply beautiful.
Comment is about windy day (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Hi Dave, love your sestina, and that word 'machino' is a stroke of genius!
Comment is about Dave Carr (poet profile)
Original item by Dave Carr
I am intrigued by this. The middle got me a bit lost, but I enjoyed reading it again. Are you or have you ever been an archaeologist I wonder. You sound like a poetic archaeologist!
Comment is about Grail (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Francine
Tue 2nd Mar 2010 21:11
Mmmm... Moi aussi j'adore l'endroit derrière mes genoux ; )
Comment is about the back of my knee (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove