I like the poem far better than the quote.
(Seems quite mean to me to have your love consigned to stay outside your cosy home and only the scent of them allowed to reach you ... tch tch tch...)
Your poem however tells of a love with proper connection.
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Original item by Vautaw
I like how there is a lot of movement in this poem, and I don't just mean the description of the way the snow moves but the fact that the onset of snow has been described in all of its stages. And then the poem ends in stuck stillness with the frozen and (implied?) unmoveable shutter.
Comment is about A Snowy Landscape (blog)
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Thank you very much for the nice comment and the likes!
Comment is about 2.36 (blog)
Original item by Mike Bartram
Thank you for reading and the likes!
Comment is about The 4th Wall (blog)
Original item by Mike Bartram
Thank you for commenting Tom. Perhaps it will grow into a new poem, even. Which makes me think... of a new best wish for poets... May you find many beautiful poems, in yourself and elsewhere.
And Hooray!!!!
An extra thank you for everyone who has clicked 'Like' for this poem as this is the first of mine which reached TWO FLOWERS
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Comment is about To My Daughters About Dreams (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Thanks for the comments Lasse and Beth. Thanks to everyone for the likes.
Comment is about Robin (blog)
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Mon 25th Jan 2021 17:32
Thanks, Greg. Interesting article. I may have a cardigan somewhere, although I can't remember ever wearing it. I hope that I would never dismiss something just because it was "a bit modern". The audience members who protested against Stravinsky's Rite of Spring would look rather ridiculous now. Perhaps time gives us a perspective.
Intellectualism has a place in poetry or any other art form, but as you say, a certain coldness can repel the reader.
Eliot himself was steeped in learning but (at least to me) his poetry was never cold or inaccessible (although you have to work at it).
Yes, some of the reaction to Amanda Gorman disappointing but I am sure she has found a wider audience. Her books seem to be selling well.
Comment is about The 'man in the cardigan' was gently ribbed by Ian McMillan. But does he have a point? (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Here's a brief comment on the subject and its £25,000 prize.
The immigrant seeks to bring change to the host
Whilst the host seeks to keep what is valued the most. ?
Comment is about Bhanu Khapil wins £25,000 TS Eliot prize with collection about immigrants and hosts (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
The reference here to "high end version" (of poetry) indicates a
sort of schism in what's written by poets for poets and what's written and touches the rest of us. It is apparent that there is a whole
world of mutually reliant, mutually admiring writers turning out stuff
that might be termed "competition" content - aimed at the appreciation of the like-minded and dismissive of anything that deviates
from what "they" consider to be "poetry".
Modern classical music has seen a similar situation for some time.
An old saying comes back to mind:
The intellectual seeks; the wise man has found.
Comment is about The 'man in the cardigan' was gently ribbed by Ian McMillan. But does he have a point? (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thanks for the comments
ARB - you're not far short of the truth. I put my poem in a transparent
sleeve (waterproof) and left it (a sort of self-publication) at the start
of a coast walk where others who took the same path might see and
read it. That she returned later with a pen to copy it was a big compliment.
KJW - Indeed, it was kind of her to follow-up - even thirty years
later! She even said how it still brought tears to her eyes
BH - good news is always welcome, not least when it crosses the
decades..
Thanks to all who took the trouble to "like" this post.
Comment is about REACHING OUT (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
a skillfully composed poem rich in its descriptive quality. Certainly an ode to a photographer. An Italian friend is a professional photographer and I shall show this to him.
Thank for a fine piece of poetic language
Keith
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Original item by Tom
Thank you for your comments Aviva, Philipos, and Stephen! Glad you liked this piece.
Best
Mike
Comment is about Dog Stars (blog)
Original item by Mike McPeek
I really enjoyed this Aviva. I especially liked your line about how some dreams "would not stay". For some reason it really stood out to me and caught my imagination. Thanks for sharing.
Comment is about To My Daughters About Dreams (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Good you, Greg.
From the man in the Clapham cardigan.
Comment is about The 'man in the cardigan' was gently ribbed by Ian McMillan. But does he have a point? (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I'm really glad you felt guilty today as this is brilliant.
It makes me think though... (and as you know, that's not always a good thing)...
Perhaps lightning and thunder only occurs when people on this planet haven't written enough poems to take the tension out of the air? It seems plausible to me! Keep writing... ?
Comment is about NOT WRITING (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Beth Harris
Mon 25th Jan 2021 12:08
I actually quite enjoyed reading that! ?
Comment is about Robin (blog)
Original item by julie callaghan
That's right. Robins often come to tease. I think they like to present themselfs. But still they are a lot easier to photograph than tits. They never rest.
Comment is about Robin (blog)
Original item by julie callaghan
Thanks for the likes for my little ditty Paul, Hugh and Stephen A. Nice to see many posts about everyone enjoying the snow.
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Thanks for all the likes
Comment is about Like Snowdrops We Should Be (blog)
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Hi Nikola,
thanks for sharing that. I found that some of the people who have overcome a severe disease know more about living life than most. Being grateful is also a quality that makes you kind of invincible ?
Comment is about Hypocrite Society (blog)
Original item by Lasse Krey
Nicola and Brian, thank you both for your comments and support.
Thanks also to everyone who has clicked 'Like' for this poem.
Comment is about To My Daughters About Dreams (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Much to think about in this. The layers of the poem spread far beyond what you can see from your window. Then, you at your window writing a poem is part of the poem too. Then, somewhere in life's global poem is the balancing measure that turns our every moment into poetry.
Comment is about Window Frame (blog)
Original item by Brian Hodgkinson Jr.
Thank you M.C for your comment. I agree that would be an important consideration ?
Thank you also to Philipos, John Andrew Nield and J.D Bardo for clicking 'Like' for this poem. ?
Comment is about Secretly Wanted (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Thank you Paul for your comment.
Thanks to Keith, John and Trevor for the likes.
(Sadly Paul's comment is no longer viewable since he left the site)
Comment is about Finders Keepers (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Thank you Martin for your comment and sorry for not responding sooner. I've also had many songs that became like that for me too. So much so that it wouldn't be fair to mention one more than another, all except 'Night People' by Dio which I'll mention since it does have the word poetry in it too.
Comment is about Music To Live By (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Smooth, open, airy, free
I like it. More!
Comment is about Sunrise Eyes (blog)
Original item by M3RK
Reflective reflecting. Liked.
Comment is about I am my own worst Enemy (blog)
Original item by David R Mellor
This has a very pensive feeling to me. I like.
Comment is about As I get older … (blog)
Original item by David R Mellor
I like this for its openness and organic feel.
Comment is about Pushing Through (blog)
Original item by David R Mellor
Thought provoking.
Comment is about Lessons From A Wandering Sun (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
poignant and well written. I like your open style.
Comment is about To My Daughters About Dreams (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Absolutely, I'll get it typed!
Thank you for letting me know.?
Comment is about To someone that cares (blog)
Original item by AbSo2021
Mon 25th Jan 2021 03:49
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Mon 25th Jan 2021 03:23
Hi.
I liked this poem it's fun.
Laughter can combat depression and there's a thing called laughter therapy. I've overcome cancer. Maybe being able to laugh at myself along the way helped xx
Comment is about Hypocrite Society (blog)
Original item by Lasse Krey
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Mon 25th Jan 2021 03:19
I took you into my dreams before I even knew x what a fabulous line
Comment is about These empty streets (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
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Mon 25th Jan 2021 03:16
A lovely poem. I dream that there will always be another dream xx lovely line xx
Comment is about To My Daughters About Dreams (blog)
Original item by Aviva Rifka Bhandari
Wow John you outdid yourself on this one. I’ll read it again when I need a good cry. So moving. ?
Comment is about These empty streets (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Yes of course the invincibility refers to what I have written in the first part of the poem.
My point is that humour allows you to be happy on your own, independent from outer circumstances. The happiness that depends on other people or money etc. is a fragile happiness that can be taken away easily. But that's just my philosophical point of view, not science. That's why I published it here ?
Comment is about Hypocrite Society (blog)
Original item by Lasse Krey
Although it might be possible to be invincible against some things, I don't think anything can make someone invincible against everything. When you don't put a clause after the word, it implies invincibility against everything.
Ability to laugh at oneself, as the topical example, might make someone invincible against criticism?
It might provide invincibility against embarrassment? There are probably a few other protections given...
But it isn't going to protect against oncoming traffic or coronavirus or a piano falling on their head, etc.
Comment is about Hypocrite Society (blog)
Original item by Lasse Krey
I'm not sure if laughing can heal us completely from cancer, but I'm sure it is a huge part of our health.
I know it's not my best line but I kept it as an exaggeration.
I also know that I have a sense of humour that not everyone likes, but as long as it makes me laugh and no one else cry I write it out loud. What do you think makes someone invincible?
When you are able to laugh when the irony of life poops on your head, I think you are quite save.
Thanks for your comment ?
Comment is about Hypocrite Society (blog)
Original item by Lasse Krey
Wow! I just realised there’ve been 15 comments on something only 2 of you have read.
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Original item by John Coopey
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Mon 25th Jan 2021 20:05
Thanks for your thoughtful insights Aviva. The poem is unfinished. I just wanted to capture what came to me. The quote to me speaks of a love separated by circumstances beyond control.
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