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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 22:02

This lovely poem feels like the message of a good friend.

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 21:56

Thank you Brian, I like how you put it 'The truth unfolds with intensity as their lives, and mine, get older.' and I guess that's how it should be in all the best stories, a page turner from start to finish and something still to find out all the way until the end.

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Brian Hodgkinson

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 21:20

"All that there is" is certain...now.

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Brian Hodgkinson

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 21:17

Very true and ever on-point. The truth unfolds with intensity as their lives, and mine, get older. We are in this together come what may.

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 20:07

Blue as a colour isn't always bad to be
There's blue as the sky
There's blue as the sea
If right down to your blood you're blue
Then you are royalty.

But if you want to change your colour
Blue and Red is Purple
Blue and Yellow is Green
So if you mix Blue with another hue
You'll blue no longer be.

For the other problems that you face, apart from being blue
I'll hope you'll soon discover ways that you can solve them too.

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julie callaghan

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 19:55

Keep writing and keep strong.

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 19:30

This world is not a perfect one and it has in it far too much of what should never happen and of what would be better not happening. It seems certain that whatever has given you so much suffering and made you judge yourself so despairingly is that type of thing. I am glad to see that you intend to fight back against those demons.

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julie callaghan

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 18:59

Thank you for all your likes folks.

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julie callaghan

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 18:58

Thanks Aviva and Paul for the likes.
Thank you Paul for your lovely colourful and kind comments on my attempts today.

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 18:05

Paul thanks for your comment too, is there even such a thing as a good care home? Even if there might be you still only get what you pay for and I doubt I'll be able to pay for much if it comes to that.

Thanks also to everyone who has clicked 'Like' for this poem.

(Sadly Paul's comment is no longer viewable since he left the site)

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 18:04

Thank you Stephen for your comment. As you say, it is important to know there are people who need specifically us, We want our children to have a place and person to turn to because we know how important it is.

This poem is also about the emotional connection though, not just the practical one. It is not only practical needs but emotional ones that make our lives no longer our own.

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Stephen Atkinson

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 17:27

A truly superb piece of poetry
Heartfelt, well crafted & flowing effortlessly throughout. ??

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Stephen Atkinson

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 17:16

I see many hopeful seeds in this superbly crafted poem. ?

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Stephen Atkinson

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 17:07

' The young now live with guilt they don't recognize' one of many great lines, Trevor. ?

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Stephen Atkinson

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 17:03

Lovely poem, Aviva & very true:
Daaad! Me taps leaking! Daaad, can you put a new light up. Daaad.. (and that's just today!).
I go down full of frowns & headshakes, but really I love that she still needs me ? And, of course, we always need them. ❤️

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 14:40

Thank you John, and that's a lovely memory which I am happy that you were able to recall and share with this poem. It makes me think forward the almost 40 years that it will be before both of mine are over 52 and I'd be nearing 90. So many uncertainties ahead, its good to know that something is certain, even if its just that I'll always worry about my children.

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John Coopey

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 13:52

The tennis analogy is right in part, MC. But not I would suggest, because of the fewer games played. I would argue it is the “pull” of the player which is paramount. If Federer can sell more tickets, attract more TV deals, attract more sponsorship etc than Serena, he can legitimately command more prize money. If Williams is the bigger draw she deserves more than him.
The biggest wrong, to my mind, is in US football (soccer to them) where the women’s game is far bigger but they are paid less. In this case they should be paid more. The men do not merit even equality of pay.

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John Coopey

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 13:43

They were built of better stuff, John.
Lovely tribute.

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John Coopey

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 13:40

I can relate to this, Aviva. Very moving. And it never passes no matter what age they are.
I remember my mam saying to me that she worried about me.
“Mam” I said “I’m 52!”
Didn’t matter - I was her little boy.

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 10:48

Whenever I have been given or even more rarely get flowers for myself I always keep them until I need the vase for the next bunch.. it can be months or years sometimes. In fact I do have a poem related to that which I might eventually post. And even then, I don't actually throw them away I keep the dried flowerheads as pot pourri.

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<Deleted User> (13740)

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 10:37

If you are centre of the universe then what about me, because I want to be centre of the universe, shall we have a fight. I don't want to as I think you will win. Unless its a food fight. I would win at a food fight. Especially if I buy a bucket of custard.

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<Deleted User> (13740)

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 10:34

Thank you for the information. I did not know I was a cough drop. Have you found your socks yet? Have you ever tried on a basque, I warn you not to, you cannot breathe in them and they break your ribs. Do you think lockdown can make a crazy person crazier? Do you know shower caps are hard to find during lockdown. I again await your response.

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julie callaghan

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 10:34

Thanks Aviva, they are not my flowers, I have kept the ones I have until they are at the wither and die stage, not great for a photo.
I feel a poem may be coming from you and your thoughts. Keep painting those nails, I think your fingers safe.... or on safe hands.

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 10:21

Lovely poem and lovely flowers but...
You have made me think and that is not always a good thing when I think. (trust me on that)

'The life of the plant is in the root and stem and what we take and try to keep is just the part that should have made the plant's survival easier - imagine if we were the same way cultivated just to have our fingers chopped off and put in vases by some other species (or even our own!) - I'm going to stop wearing nail varnish just in case. '

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Rick Varden

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 09:59

Thank you

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Rick Varden

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 09:58

Thank you Aviva

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 08:27

I smell something fishy
Some palms have been greased
Investigate the relationship
Between Chippy and Police!

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 08:11

What a heart-catching tale, told so melodically and well. I love the transition of sounds and pace in this part to reflect the sudden turbulence and power of the storm.

I remember well the
Day it came
The clouds that brought the
Storm that changed
The summer sky and
Satin breeze to
Pouring
Pounding
Pelting rain

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Stephen Atkinson

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 06:56

Thanks for reading & tapping the Like, John ?

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Mike McPeek

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 04:51

LOL John! Nothing like being stalked by "mans best friend" while enjoying a bite.

Cheers!

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Kristian Deidre Brown

Fri 22nd Jan 2021 03:26

Hi, Stephen! Thanks for your welcoming comment on my profile ? I’ve really enjoyed reading through yours! In particular, your segment “About each poem”- learning about where an artist finds their inspiration is one of my very favorite things! Your concepts are thought provoking and nostalgic. Looking forward to reading more of your pieces!

Kristian ?

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Fri 22nd Jan 2021 03:23

I'm all I have for me
A friend, lover and my kindred self
A monster like devil attacks
Built a fort he can't break
But from windows he slyly approach
Won't kill him for anything
He will die his own death
Or when from outside he will be attacked
As for now I have comfort in me
Don't need anybody
I have an angel mother in me
I have an innocent self being protected by forces heavenly
So demons can try and make me weep
But they can't attain any victory in destroying me
So the story begins.

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Thu 21st Jan 2021 23:00

Thank you Stephen once again for taking time to comment.
There are a lot of reassurances built into this poem (how I comprehend it when I wrote it and when I read it) but I am glad to know that reassurance carries across to the reader too.

Thanks also to everyone who has clicked 'Like' for this poem. ?

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John Coopey

Thu 21st Jan 2021 22:37

You're right about the music of trains, Philipos. They also have their own mesmeric scent. If I could bottle that mix of smoke, oil and steam I could be a millionaire.
And thanks for the Likes, Julie, Stephen and Aviva and Dean.

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Thu 21st Jan 2021 22:27

I'm still waiting my vaccinations
and the protection that they accord
(Though I'm delighted to hear you've had your turn)
But I can't think of Spanish vacations
Spanish Omelette is all I can afford
(But I'm happy you're better off, live as you earn ?)

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 21st Jan 2021 22:24

I certainly concur about equality before the law and its administration,
which, of course, includes who does what and gets paid what.
Same pay for the same work (*). But the word has been adopted as
a means of manipulation.. I see it skewed "to suit" in life..
(*) When pro.female tennis players demand pay on a par with the
male participants in the sport, then playing the same number of games to the same level of intensity would be a start. But then that probably sees me fall foul of those other skewed words: sexism and
racism. Hey-ho. Blanket commodity - it is not. You're right there.

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Philipos

Thu 21st Jan 2021 22:24


Trains make their own kind of music John.

When I was on a long visit to South Africa some years ago I had one of my poems published in an enthusiast's magazine.

However, I did enjoy your Johnny Cash rendition especially.

P

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John Coopey

Thu 21st Jan 2021 21:57

Well done, Trev. But stay careful - it's not over yet.

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John Coopey

Thu 21st Jan 2021 21:47

Too right, Mike. I never fully understood the phrase "undivided attention" until I saw my daughter's dog watching me eat.

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John Coopey

Thu 21st Jan 2021 21:44

Rest easy, y'all. It was just the pocket.

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John Coopey

Thu 21st Jan 2021 21:33

MC - Do you not believe there should equality before the law or equality at the ballot box or equality in pay for jobs of equal worth? Equality is not a blanket commodity that applies over all things. In some aspects of life there is equality; in some it is an aspiration; in others (as your cite Einstein) it is plainly ridiculous.

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Stephen Atkinson

Thu 21st Jan 2021 20:08

And thanks for the additional likes Julie, Aviva, & Holden, appreciated as always ???

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julie callaghan

Thu 21st Jan 2021 19:35

Thanks for the likes Aviva, Stephen A, Stephen G and Paul. Hopefully Christoph didn’t affect anyone too badly.

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Thu 21st Jan 2021 19:30

This is softly soothing even though it feels like it fluctuates between sadness and serenity and never really settles on either. Hopefully the sun will shine again, and drifting will be more enjoyable some day whilst you're on the way to wherever you go.

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Thu 21st Jan 2021 19:16

This feels like a real performance piece. It has got so much scope in the cadence and placement of rhyme to work so well at a live read (just my opinion, what do I know, I can only say what I think though)

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Thu 21st Jan 2021 19:11

Nought is a strange number
Even financially, rarely true.
And times are tough
more so without slumber
But even tougher is you.

Good luck and I hope things improve.

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<Deleted User> (18980)

Thu 21st Jan 2021 19:01

What Keith said.

Good one Trevor,

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d.knape

Thu 21st Jan 2021 18:50


What on earth are you doing?
thinking of a poem?
or
getting a sun tan?

and...what about those old shoes?
what size do you wear?
maybe I can send you some new ones.

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Thu 21st Jan 2021 18:36

The second stanza in particular has some lovely and evocative imagery and phrasing.

Also, I'm going to have to look much closer behind the doors, seems as if I've not been paying enough attention.

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 21st Jan 2021 17:32

Some excellent lines - especially those closing this piece.

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