I remember the Paul Jones having played it a few times John. It was different dances one after another linked by Here we go round the mulberry bush; I think your version if more behind the bush, but infinitely preferable to the original dull affair from a musical perspective. Roll on the drums and i'm away!!
I love the blend of age and sex, it's the only way nowadays.
Ray
Comment is about BARN DANCE (PROGRESSIVE) (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Stimulating imagery at work here.
Comment is about 'The streetlights outside flashing off one by one like old men blinking their cloudy eyes' (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I like being led this merry dance! But couldn't the Reverend's grip have been "a shade too possessive" instead ? ? Just carping like we old folk do!
Comment is about BARN DANCE (PROGRESSIVE) (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
There's no ducking the welcome humour in this one!
Comment is about Bill and the ducks (blog)
Original item by hugh
Thanks, Julie. It sums up a whole generation, who were mostly very, very good. Most of them had such a great range e.g. Des O'Connor with his many albums and Ken Dodd singing 'Nessun Dorma' aged 80.
Comment is about After Show Party (blog)
Original item by julie callaghan
Enjoyable and educational (I didn't know what a Paul Jones was!).
Good stuff.
Comment is about BARN DANCE (PROGRESSIVE) (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
These comments are so encouraging! Thank you all very much and to those who clicked the like as well.
Perhaps we shall have some of these things sooner than we think. Let's be optimists!
John, I take your point and see what you mean as I read it again. Who knows? There may be an updated version!
Comment is about I want (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
I wrote this one yesterday at the quack of dawn.
Comment is about Bill and the ducks (blog)
Original item by hugh
Really liked this one Nigel. Next up it's an eclipse at the end of November?
Comment is about Once in a Blue Moon (blog)
Original item by Nigel Astell
Tue 17th Nov 2020 12:05
Ruth O'Reilly
your smile is smiley
your name although
deserves that O.
?
Comment is about Ruth O'Reilly (poet profile)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Thanks for the like Branwell
Comment is about After Show Party (blog)
Original item by julie callaghan
<Deleted User> (13740)
Tue 17th Nov 2020 09:34
Ooh I like this it's a hocus pocus of images and ideas x
Comment is about Roman de la rose (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Stuart,
A very appropriate poem for the present lockdown situation.
Well crafted.
Keith
Comment is about Trial of Life (blog)
Original item by Stuart Vanner
Personally, I think we should all be given a dose of it and then asked which we prefer.
Comment is about Lockdown (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
What a fabulous idea, Mike - a cock bird being elected mayor. Perhaps you’re onto something there. Maybe the opposite is true; perhaps democracy is just a sophisticated veneer that facilitates our cock birds to validate themselves.
Comment is about The Mayor of Occidental (blog)
Original item by Mike McPeek
Simple and poignant, especially during a lockdown. An insight into how valuable are the simple things in life when you can’t have them. If I was being ultra-critical, Stephen, I found the rhythm a bit clunky where you introduce the phrase “hair-raising”.
Comment is about I want (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
Be wary, Trevor. This vaccine is designed to alter your Brian.
Comment is about Viral Invader (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Thank you Julie and Po, much appreciated.
Comment is about The River & The Sea (blog)
Original item by Dean Fraser
i fell in love with the dreamland beneath the foot. Such enchanting words and comparison. Great work
Ak
Comment is about Tread gently (blog)
Original item by Abdul Ahmad
i agree with shifa abdul this piece enhanced by vocabulary as well and a beautiful read.
Ak
Comment is about Will Christmas 2020 happen? (blog)
Original item by Abdul Ahmad
Holding grudge against anyone only pull your life more into the dark abyssess of world.
But to forgive and cherish, the strength required is something a mother who bears the pain during birthgiving can behold.
Ak
Comment is about Divine forgiveness (blog)
Original item by Abdul Ahmad
Ira Lightman
Mon 16th Nov 2020 23:51
This is the latest discovery, from Judith Beveridge's prose poem Inspector of Pastimes, published in 2003 when she was 47 years old. Only phrases in square brackets are NOT borrowed without acknowledgement from Dr Moti Chandra, pioneering Hindi scholar (1908-1973):
Paint your body with fragrant paste. Fumigate yourselves with incense smoke and close the windows of your house. It is the Season of Early Dew, [and you must wait before you can] sit on the terrace and receive the warmth of the rising sun. Soon, [soft] breezes will begin to blow [and] a fleet of high, broad ships [arrive, and you will receive gifts of] palanquins, sleeping cots with jewelled legs, golden betel boxes, camphor and silks.
In the Rainy Season, when the clouds ramble and the trees spread their fragrances, and the ground is covered with soft [mosses] – the yellow, black [and red] liquors will be served. [It is then I shall] blow a tune into my conch-shell, [request] the cuckoos to sing, the black bees to hum.
[It is at this time too, that I shall ask you to inspect yourself for] the marks of your lover's teeth, [that you orate] the comforts as described in the [Seventh] Canto, [that you] paint your breasts, [that you recite from] the Breviary of [Bawds and] Rakes, [that you] cut out designs on lotus leaves and place them in a boat to reach the Ganges; [that you] dance, indifferent to worldly things; that you become assiduous in the use of go-betweens in the passages of coquetry; [that you become vigilant of] buffoons, hangers-on[, misfeasors and cheats].
[In the Month of the Two Full Moons, if you spend it with a] fellow from nowhere, a wastrel whose face is his fortune, you will offend several admirers and most likely pauperise yourself. [It is here, at this juncture in the year, that I may need to sermonise] on death-defying truculence, [on] flattery of the strong [and blandishments] to the weak. [Then, out of weeping mud, with my docked and whittled breath blowing once more into the conch – I shall ask, before the month ends, that you give your evenings to reflecting upon] the interrelated chances of misery and money.
[During the Festival of the Brain Fever Bird,] anything sinfully stolen had to be returned to its owners, anything honestly earned must be given to the gods. [Look, already it is the Season of Fallen Stars – and there is a river asking what is this through which I flow?
Soon the Modest Season of Phantasmagoria will arrive and, yes, I shall bring to you the nightingale that has fallen from its tree. And at last, when the Supernal Equator is eclipsed by the sun, you will fit] a jasmine chaplet to your hair and wear earrings of Palmyra frond [and laugh in uproar as you walk through the streets. Then I will hand you baskets of leaves, and you’ll bathe in the] tanks [that I have ordained] within the gardens of your home, [before it is the Month of Winds with Fragile Chimes in the Season of Ephemeral Snows.]
The bits not in square brackets are all from Moti Chandra, uncredited. They are near-verbatim phrases taken from two 5-10 page sections of his book, The World of Courtesans.
It's not one line borrowing among twenty original lines.
More here:
https://twitter.com/iralightman/status/1327193571443793923
https://www.facebook.com/ira.lightman/posts/10158254282812659
Comment is about Leading Australian poet admits borrowing without attribution after intervention by poetry sleuth (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Kept safe inside
every single thought
soul searching
stays in your poem.
Comment is about Soul Searching (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
I like the metrical consistency in this poem Stephen, and the growing beauty as it opens up towards the end.
Comment is about I want (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
Thanks for your thoughts, Bon and MC. I used to hold the view when I was young that we’d got it the wrong way round. You should retire on a pension till you were 30, then have to go out to work until you pegged it. I don’t think that now!
And thanks for the Like, Stephen Gospage.
Comment is about I MISS THE MAN THAT I USED TO BE (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
We don't miss the man you used to be !
Where was he to bring us glee...
Or the knowledge that the years see -
And anticipate both most eagerly? ?
Comment is about I MISS THE MAN THAT I USED TO BE (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (9882)
Mon 16th Nov 2020 18:47
It might be said that all art is derivative, whether it be via inspiration,
subject matter, or the adoption of a written choice phrase or saying.
It has to be a matter of degree that separates this from stone cold
plagiarism. I've read whole paragraphs that have been lifted from
elsewhere; that is my own idea of plagiarism.
Comment is about Leading Australian poet admits borrowing without attribution after intervention by poetry sleuth (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
It must be a real test of endurance for many, I'm sure. I spent a
career watching over "the public" from apart and have no problem
coping with what is asked of me in retirement. I get more than
enough company from what I see on TV (increasingly less as time
moves on and the same old MSM stuff is pushed out). My next
venture outside (after checking the car late last Sunday) will be to
the dentist for an afternoon session in a few days. Personally, i'd
rather not have to bother. These things always seem to happen at
the most inconvenient times, don't they?
As for these intrusions on our lives - Russia had Chernobyl and
China had Wuhan. Two huge countries hardly known for saying
"It was me, guv" !!. So many problems affecting health arrive from
"the east".
P.S. My niece complains of fogged spectacles out shopping - so it
seems a common problem to add to the irritation!!
Comment is about Lockdown (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Thank you Dean, and both Stephens for the likes.
Comment is about Social Media (blog)
Original item by julie callaghan
age is overrated, what we exchange for youthful desire never really fully compensates.
Comment is about I MISS THE MAN THAT I USED TO BE (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Beautiful. I also want these things! ❤️?
Comment is about I want (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
I absolutely love the Beatles Paul❤
Comment is about Love’s presence 16 (blog)
Original item by Racoon ?
Thank you Paul. I have not felt like it his since.
Time will forever teach us and throw new emotions are way right
Comment is about Dreaming Love 2016 (blog)
Original item by Racoon ?
Thank you everyone. Took a lot of me to approach this way of recording my work
Comment is about 24 View (blog)
Original item by Racoon ?
Sorry Stephen G. I cannot accept this, not from a dictatorship which re educates muslims in concentration camps. Nefarious deeds not cock ups occur when dealing with totalitarian regimes. Remember Hitler and eugenics?????
Comment is about Lockdown (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Its nice to to hear from you after such a long absence. Welcome back.
Thank you for striking the like for Silenced and Bleak future. Appreciated as always.
Comment is about Anmolpreet Kaur (poet profile)
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<Deleted User> (13740)
Mon 16th Nov 2020 17:25
Aw, why is it called swingers? I thought they were people who go to strange clubs and all get off with each other?
Comment is about The Swinger (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13740)
Mon 16th Nov 2020 17:23
Great poem, Keith, although cock-up usually beats conspiracy. Interesting reading, though.
Comment is about Lockdown (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Po Wit - I like it Paul!
Comment is about The Mayor of Occidental (blog)
Original item by Mike McPeek
Another classic of description - bathing us with black and white and the need to carry on regardless. The truth of words stands tall.
Ray
Comment is about MY FATHERS EYES (blog)
Original item by trevor homer
I agree with you Keith it's getting hard to believe this situation is what we're led to believe it is! Well expressed in your poem.
Comment is about Lockdown (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
?same wavelength Keith. I was expecting the Chinese Government to, miraculously, find a vaccine & sell it to the world ! Obviously a bigger agenda ensues ...
Comment is about Lockdown (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Paul,
I cannot but think that there is something more sinister afoot. Without a declaration of war, an already hostile nation, has ruined the economies of most nations in the world and killed hundreds and thousands of people with few casualties of their own. With this in mind we seem ignore any possibility of foul play and regard this as a genuine natural disaster. I believe this is a man made epidemic by those hungry for power in a world where the USA is no longer in the ascendancy. NBC nuclear, biological and chemical warfare suits were issued to the British Army in the 1960's to my personal knowledge. We were well in advance of out time.
Comment is about Lockdown (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
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Mon 16th Nov 2020 13:18
julie callaghan
Tue 17th Nov 2020 18:57
Thanks for the comment and like Stephen and for the like Dean.
Comment is about After Show Party (blog)
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