Enjoyed this poem despite some bits I didn't get like line 4 of the second stanza and 'deepest mantel' but the bird's eye view of the Thames is great and works well, although these days it would probably be a drone's eye view. However, this is back in the day when life was still recognizably human.
John S
Comment is about TOWER RAVEN (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thank you for acknowledging my work and hearing me Don.
Comment is about You hear me? (blog)
Original item by Fred Nicholson
Very good Fred. I hear you loud and clear.....
Comment is about You hear me? (blog)
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Hey folks I'm back to tell you
What's on the other side
(We wait with bated breath Don....)
You must be quiet and promise
Me not to deride
(No way mate....)
You better bring your dancing shoes
Cos lotsa angels there
Shimmying round in diaphanous gowns
(No Keith, not quite bare....)
They have a real cool bar there
Spirits of all kind
It's like a great big treasure hunt
Surprising what you'll find
(You don't believe a word of me do you?....oh ye of little faith... Thalia is shaking her head.....no, she's giggling....stop it girl......you'll destroy my shining image in front of my fellow poets.....)
(He does go on....) ?
Comment is about A Reason (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Thank you for your comments
Who the hell am I
Well my name philip Stevens
All gets a bit complicated after that
I shouldn't compartmentalize myself
Because when I do
I find there is more than one of me
what about you
Comment is about Sense of self (blog)
Original item by Phils Words
I agree Don. Lessons learned the hard way! Thanks for reading and commenting. ?
Comment is about Willpower and Discipline (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
Thanks Ray. The Yezedi have been persecuted for the crime of not being Muslim for 1500 years. Unthinkable. Isn't it?
Comment is about Yezedi - 2014-2019 (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
'Willpower and discipline
can be your worst enemy
or best friend'
So true....
Comment is about Willpower and Discipline (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
Hi Cynthia, I'm glad you posted this as it's a question I've wondered myself. I wouldn't say you never see a dead bird, but considering how many live ones there are you don't see that many dead ones.
Thanks Kevin
Comment is about Where Do Birds Go When They Die? (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thank you for reading and your lovely comment Kate! It is definitely a loaded poem. I wish I had read a poem like this when I was young. One of the greatest things about poetry is that no experience is wasted!
Comment is about Willpower and Discipline (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
Fred, your words are illuminating, they make sense. Keep it up.
Thanks Keith
Comment is about Color Matters (blog)
Original item by Fred Nicholson
May I say welcome back Hannah - was thinking of you only yesterday strangely enough. Your comment has given me a real buzz, thank you. I hope the world is well with you.
Ray
Comment is about TOWER RAVEN (blog)
Original item by ray pool
a nicely turned thought pattern, poetic for sure and impactful for its brevity Ruth!
Ray
Comment is about Model Words (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Your whole poem is a cry from the heart Keith. A sad one really, in view of the impossibility of its being truly answered, though many would claim their own beliefs as valid. We all need reasons to continue, but the exhilaration of life itself serves me and the adventure of it, with its cross winds and challenges. I'm not sure if you have any answers and maybe the poem is just to test other's resolve. I don't know, as writing can be pure imagination. Knowing how conscientious you are I think you may enlighten me!
All the best, Ray
Comment is about A Reason (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Hi John. While I am not familiar with the specific details of tribal wars and invasions, I can see the power behind this and the desperation, of the constant wearing down of family life and the terrible uncertainties and crimes embodied here. I understand there has been a withdrawal of American troops leaving an untenable situation here. David would have had more to say and more effectively. It appears that Islam is the main protagonist behind the thinking.
I can follow your commitment in a desire for resolution - however slim the possibility.
Ray
Comment is about Yezedi - 2014-2019 (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
I've posed this question myself on WOL - particularly with regard to
the ubiquitous pigeon in city streets. Do other pigeons carry them
off to some avian Valhalla when their time comes? As for the
appearance of other lifeforms, my securely wrapped plastic bags of
kitchen waste suddenly display insect activity within supposedly
secure confines - how so? There was none in the freshly discarded
items when the container - usually a clear polythene bag - was put
aside before being placed into the large black plastic rubbish bag that
the council insist on. I suspect that when we have seen the end of
humanity on this planet, other smaller lifeforms will be getting on
with their own extraordinary ability to survive and prosper - even
without human rubbish to visit uninvited and thrive on !
Comment is about Where Do Birds Go When They Die? (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Don and Kevin,
Thank you for responding to this poem which poses the problems of a purpose for life, if there is one and what, if anything, lies beyond this existence. Don says he is not religious but thinks it logical that there must be some outcome to life. Kevin, would be happy to travel down the tunnel of darkness to rest and into nothingness. Yet some including myself sense a feeling of anticipation in death but find it difficult to articulate. Eternity is a strange word. No one has returned from the grave to illuminate our knowledge so we are all left in the dark. I feel that we shall be forever haunted by this enigma and only our personal experience of death will determine an answer.
Thank you again.
Keith
Comment is about A Reason (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
A clever idea Marina. A double whammy with the tail and the free head that could strike - a visual poem so effective.
Ray
Comment is about anxiety. (blog)
Original item by Marina T
So realistic!
Comment is about Why Rest in Peace after Death? (blog)
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Sat 12th Oct 2019 19:28
Love this poem. The ravens are impressive and beautiful, as well as having a legendary role for London.
Hannah
Comment is about TOWER RAVEN (blog)
Original item by ray pool
...and the stories we forget to dream about scream out to be heard...?
Comment is about Technique (blog)
Original item by Tom
Some may agree this subject, 'Color Matters'
is infuriating, frustrating and downright annoying.
These experiences are not ouchies, that first appear
in the body. These grouped emotions start up stairs
and may become headaches and body maladies.
I hear you loud and clear!
White Black Pink Ochre
Rough Dry Baggy Firm
skins don't matter to me,
and it's not about skin tone.
My tone is paper bag brown.
What do you name yours?
It's about generations of families
severed from their rich cultures,
deprived of their native languages,
and given Jesus Christ to worship.
400 years later we watch Wakanda
and munch on hot buttered popcorn.
It's about Native American Indians. STOP!
Think about that. They certainly are natives.
American because of Mr. Vespucius.
Indian because of a geographical error.
90% of them were killed purposefully,
some not, by folks wanting to own land.
Physical, emotional and spiritual abuse
starvation deprivation and outright murder
may have long lasting affects (or is it effects),
on someone's outcome. What do you think?
It's about feeling it in my bones,
not just reading or thinking about it.
'Color Matters' is not just about Indians and cowboys,
or Crayola hues. It's really about Black and White.
This is North America, where one(1) drop of African
blood makes you black. You ever hear such nonsense
where you live? This won't be found in current law books,
but it lives on, in the heads of many here in the U.S of A.
M.C. Newberry, I don't know your racial heritage
and do know the adage about birds of a feather.
It has been that way AND change is quickening.
Each successive generation is more tuned in.
Old farts like me still cling to the past,
and need to step aside.
So many young people connecting in/with/for life/communion/love awakening.
M.C. Newberry, I heartily thank you for the thought-full
response to my work and will respond to any and all other comments. I did not know what identifying name you'd prefer, so I used the name in front of me.
Blessings abound,
f
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Cynthia, I thank you for the welcome.
f
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
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Beautiful thought, elegantly expressed with poetic panache!
Comment is about Model Words (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Hi Cynthia. Isn't it a mystery as you say. The converse may be said about where do Garden spiders emerge from. When I found a blackbird dead in my garden(cat kill probably) there were bluebottles everywhere. Where from?
Enjoyed the poem. Ray
Comment is about Where Do Birds Go When They Die? (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Ooh I like that Nigel How you've turned it around to a model poet!
Comment is about Model Words (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Once certain words hit my head, they have to find release. Kind of on the premise that they must have some value or they wouldn't have 'come'. And I then wonder: a thought worth sharing?
I mostly say to myself: If this thought amuses me, perhaps it will 'tickle' someone else. Or they'll think I'm an idiot! Either way - OK.
Comment is about Where Do Birds Go When They Die? (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
A model poet
uses art in
so many ways
sometimes finding themselves
inside a poem.
Comment is about Model Words (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Thanks Philip for your likes on Halfway There and Craving
Comment is about Phils Words (poet profile)
Original item by Phils Words
Wlcome to WOL, Mr.Nicholson. An active mind has to seek outlet. You have found a fine platform.
Comment is about Fred Nicholson (poet profile)
Original item by Fred Nicholson
Expressed with truth, strength and grace.
Comment is about Sad Returns (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Hi Graham. Thanks for sharing those reminiscences. There, s refuge in the past. In the 70s I used to drive round the back streets to see the cobbles and cannon bollards and warehouses. I used to do the river boats and pull in to Wapping stairs. I'll get my coat. I
Don were you abducted? Theyre allergic to Aussies. I'm glad you enjoyed my raven's romp thanks!
Ray
Comment is about TOWER RAVEN (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Ah Thank you Rose, I'm glad that you 'got' what I was trying to do with this piece. A bit like myself I guess I may look simplistic but I'd like to think that there is a bit more depth to me ?
Comment is about Model Words (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
<Deleted User> (9882)
Sat 12th Oct 2019 11:47
this piece at first glance appears simplistic until that is, one reads it over and over again
what a nice little masterpiece!
Rose ?
Comment is about Model Words (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
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Sat 12th Oct 2019 11:43
Jason I liked this concept of waiting so long for an apology from a so called friend, that in the end you decided to apologise and finish it instead.
Comment is about Start With An Apology (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
If I were running the competition you would get the prize.....
Comment is about Start With An Apology (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Putin already looks like he has been photographed the wrong way around even when the camera is the right way up! ? there was no need for all that surgery he's had.
Comment is about Moonwalk Oops (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Thanks Don, Dorothy and kate. Glad you liked it, and yes Don you're right, the rhythm did come first. It's a competition piece where the prompt was, "Broken Friendship," and whilst in this case it's hypothetical, it accurately describes a couple of past friendships. Writers do write life, but we also question it.
Thanks so much all of you.
J. x
Comment is about Start With An Apology (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Who the hell? or what the hell?
Whatever should it be?
I'm mixed, completely buggered up
So gramatically..
Or is it 'whichever should it be?'......
What the hell's going on here?.......
Dunno....blame Phil ?
Comment is about Sense of self (blog)
Original item by Phils Words
Good golly gosh I hope they
Had camera right way up
We wouldn't want to see him drinking
From upside-downish teacup
Now would we?....?
Imagine the embarrassment
Putin red in face
Could not face his people
Gone upside down to space
I've never heard of infin space
I never studied 'infin'
I'll take your word Ruth it exists
(Is it to do with Rin Tin?...)
Tin?.....?
Comment is about Moonwalk Oops (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Love affair stuff I can relate to. The perfume of hot performance! I remember the smell of the black cloth on my fender Rhodes in 1975
Thanks for this Allison.
Comment is about Gibson (blog)
Original item by Allison Wonder
A different facet of yourself will be revealed for every new person that you meet, so it's never possible to completely know who we are!
Comment is about Sense of self (blog)
Original item by Phils Words
Coincidentally, the first Russian man to walk in space has just passed over to infinite space yesterday.
Comment is about Moonwalk Oops (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Oblivion, oblivion
Look forward I to thee
Please swallow me into your black
I plead, on bended knee
Oblivion here, you bended one
Have you passed my test?
You needs be knackered, buggered up
Incapable of rest
Oblivion I assure you
WOL's sapped my inner core
I'm knackered, fully buggered up
And can do no more
(Come in Don.....)
(Gosh it's black in here?...)
(We specialize in doom and gloom....)
(Help! let me outa here......)
Nod to kJ ?
Comment is about A Reason (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Fred Nicholson
Sun 13th Oct 2019 02:45
I thank you for hearing me Don.
f
Comment is about Don Matthews (poet profile)
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