Gerard Scalera Jr.
feedback on my newest poem
Broken Soul
Drawn-in face
Facial expressions non-existant
Zero affect
A blank space
Rampant emotions
Limited positivity
Lost in your own misery
Unwilling to feel
Thought process erased
Fear, anger, sadness, and exhaustion
Engraved on your face
Like writing on a tombstone
Words unspoken
Scream in silence
Completely secluded
Shadow of darkness
Confined to a cell
Cut off from light
Personal choices made
Thick walls built
Isolation preferred
Lack of passion and desire
Fear of death
Closed off to love and affection
Surviving with a broken soul
Is an existence
Not a way of life
12:55am
April 20,2018
Drawn-in face
Facial expressions non-existant
Zero affect
A blank space
Rampant emotions
Limited positivity
Lost in your own misery
Unwilling to feel
Thought process erased
Fear, anger, sadness, and exhaustion
Engraved on your face
Like writing on a tombstone
Words unspoken
Scream in silence
Completely secluded
Shadow of darkness
Confined to a cell
Cut off from light
Personal choices made
Thick walls built
Isolation preferred
Lack of passion and desire
Fear of death
Closed off to love and affection
Surviving with a broken soul
Is an existence
Not a way of life
12:55am
April 20,2018
Fri, 20 Apr 2018 09:38 am
<Deleted User> (14241)
I like the dark cage the words build as they progress. Very similar to the feelings of isolation and loneliness that come with social anxiety and depression.
Sat, 28 Apr 2018 10:41 pm
Arihant Shrivardhan
Those days
I remember the days
when we were young and eccentric,
Our dreams knew no bounds
they were pure and unrealistic
We had each other
that's all we cared about,
and here we stand now
stuck in our daily whereabouts
We lived in an utopia
holding onto each other,
here we are now
competing and backstabbing one another
We grew we learnt
more like corrupted,
we grew apart and
the friendships and bondings erupted
I still look at each one of you
craving for those times,
When we were a unit,
you took one out
we fell and rose together!
I remember the days
when we were young and eccentric,
Our dreams knew no bounds
they were pure and unrealistic
We had each other
that's all we cared about,
and here we stand now
stuck in our daily whereabouts
We lived in an utopia
holding onto each other,
here we are now
competing and backstabbing one another
We grew we learnt
more like corrupted,
we grew apart and
the friendships and bondings erupted
I still look at each one of you
craving for those times,
When we were a unit,
you took one out
we fell and rose together!
Mon, 9 Jul 2018 05:05 pm
Thought provoking
poem to which I can relate.
Enjoyed it.
Taylor
poem to which I can relate.
Enjoyed it.
Taylor
Fri, 20 Jul 2018 08:46 pm