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Thanks for your welcome to WOL and your kind words on 'The Dream at the Party'.

Steve, sorry I missed Sale Waterside last Tuesday. I was in hospital.

Hi Steve - many thanks for commenting on 'Alarm' I do appreciate your views and acknowledge being remiss and unconventional - best regards

cropped the quiet room like you said it does work well i have made it into a song http://soundcloud.com/alienpoet/the-quiet-room-becomes-loneliness

cheers Steve, I am hoping to witness the Garside step-away tonight

Hi Steve

Cheers for your comment on Blood. See your points, but as it's a haiku, the 'cold air' is there to represent a season. I could lose the 'the' on that line by using something like 'frozen' instead - something that would give me the two syllables lost with 'the cold'.

Course, I could just rewrite whole sections of it and change it from a haiku to a 'normal' poem. Am intending to rewrite a few of them anyway :)

Cheers again

Hi Steve - thanks for commenting on the Abbey Road poem - line markers do make a difference don't they much obliged for that - just checked out your recent one 'Untitled' and saw how well it works there - read your biog too -awesome

re kissed , yes you are right , and this month is the first month i am beginning to see how to link ideas together in a poem ... watch this space i guess , :)

thankyou for taking the time to read and comment on all my work :)

Hi, Steve! Thank you so much for the comments on "Indian Summer" and for a good advice. Much appreciate it. With warmest wishes, Larisa

Congratulations on your recognition in the Welsh Poetry Competition!

hi Steve, for no real reason other than ambling through the lanes of the internet I hav had a relaxing time looking at your costal views paintings .Night view 1 being my favourite. I think I will retire within the sound of the sea... both tonight and in old age. toodle pip. Win

Hi! Thanks for commenting on Mapping. I know what you mean about some of the phrases but I was trying to make what is a cliche when applied to the landscape something new when applied to a human body. That was the idea anyway. But I may think of an alternative.

I love your sermons... in a patriarchally received way :)

Thanks for your comments on my HD poem. I agree with what you say. As so often, I rushed to put the poem on. Have turned breath into breathe, which is what it was meant to be. I think my problem is that my poems jump into my head then right onto the page without me thinking much about them! Nice to get such a lot of caring feedback! xx

Steve, thank you for the comments on my poem 'the daylight comes with me' - appreciate you taking the time to consider it closely. I see your point and I did think about the repitition of 'charm' at the time but, as is my tendency, I thought 'fuck it' and left it as it was!! Lazyitis.

thanks again
John

:-)

thanks very much for your considered response to my comment. It's really very informative. :-)

Janet.x

Hi Steve,
Thanks for your suggestions on re-writing my recent blog - I read it through, briefly, and liked some of your ideas, but when I looked again for it - it had disappeared. If you have a copy, I'd appreciate it, if that's possible?
Talk soon,
Cx

Thank you so much for your input Steve...
Yeah, I chose 'In the darkness of night' for the dual meaning...
When I wrote this, my inspiration came from a past dream and a current situation...
Will look at it again... I appreciate your time.

Francine x

Hey up Steve,
Thank for all of your encouraging critique and edit advice, I think thatsa great improvement.

Great to hear from u.
Many Thanks
Gus

Hey Steve I read Circle last night, loved the rhythm of it, it really rattles along towards the end, Images coming thick and fast... liked it lots... shoeless said tho that I would have to quick to comment on it as you take stuff off pretty quick too... as I said last night tho... I am Sloooooooow lol

...howdo steve..many thanks for the comments on 'my father'..it was written in couplets, all ending on different words to those seen here. I'd copied it from 'word' and every time I tried to paste it into the 'blog' area the lines came out 'double spaced', in the end I moved all the lines about until they were more compact, pressed all the buttons and it suddenly 'pasted' in as you see it..so I left it alone !!..nevertheless it was very astute of you to realise it doesn't look right....I will take in your ideas, not having aired my poems much until now...thanks...chris.

Steve many many thanks for taking the time to read my poetry, your suggestions demonstrate a great deal of experience which I am lacking and I will be editing along the the lines of your suggestions very soon
Thank you so much.
Augusta x

Hi steve, thanks for your comments on The Feminine Beauty. The way you have restructured the poem is something i have been trying to achieve. Thats exactly the way i like to structure the poems i often write, but, have had no training and forming the structure thus is something that i can now try to employ. Thank you for your help. Be well blue.

MIke
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Hi Steve. thanks for reading and commenting on Oil and Cheese / Chalk and Water. Win

Hi steve...Yes i wish to perform! More than anything! Do you have some info for me please? And would you mind if i tagged along with you some time?....Yosh(shane)

Hi Steve,
Thanks for looking in on "The Gift." Seamus Heaney eh? Now I know you're winding me up!
Enjoyed your "Soliloquy". It has a surreal, semi-comatose, opiate induced feel of drifting off - which I hope is what you intended. I liked the repeat at the end; adds both emphasis and rhythm.
Regards,
A.E.

you know i like your work , sometimes i find it too hard to comment directly though .

Just enjoyed "Matese", Steve.

i think your right a poem is never finished thanks for the comment the other day it really helped me, the new version is now posted if your interested, im liking your poetry, its great work and i enjoyed them thoughroughly, chris.