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Metamorphosis

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Didn't recognise who the smile came from

remembering the chrysalis child.

Metal entwined teeth, tangled hair,

a nose too large for a little face,

unhappy self-doubting eyes,

the too tall insecurity and gawkiness.

Now suddenly transformed into a butterfly,

blessed with gazelle-like grace

glowing skin, shining tresses, sparkling eyes.

The drastic effect of the hated metal

giving her a memorable mouth.

It may just be due to hormone magic,

and no Sapphic follower I,

but she certainly brightened a dark day!

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◄ Doing it Gingerly

Loved to Death ►

Comments

<Deleted User> (18118)

Wed 29th Apr 2020 20:26

Beautiful transformation, lovingly crafted.

Hannah

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jennifer Malden

Wed 29th Apr 2020 17:24

Thanks so much Tom, Philipos, Don, Cynthia and Abdul for the
generous and encouraging comments! Very gratifying. Delighted you all found it enjoyable.

Jennifer




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Abdul Ahmad

Wed 29th Apr 2020 12:40

?very good.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 29th Apr 2020 11:57

Super poem, both subject and craftsmanship.

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Don Matthews

Wed 29th Apr 2020 10:42

So good Jennifer.....

Philipos

Wed 29th Apr 2020 10:30

They do that butterflies - they steal (and sometimes steel away) your smile. Lovely memory poem. P

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Tom

Wed 29th Apr 2020 10:16

Really great Jennifer; love these lines in particular "The drastic effect of the hated metal / giving her a memorable mouth." Brilliant.

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