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Last day part ii

And it was then, when her world filled with
orange light
that she knew her days end had come.
As she fell to her knees the darksouls came upon her,
she could smell their decay,
could taste it strong and sick.
She wouldn't scream,
wouldn't let them see her torture.
She knew they would revel in her terror so she bit down on her lips,
ignoring the blood and the flash of pain.
When the orange faded to amber and then yellow,
she too faded into pale.
Lost somewhere inside herself,
her body broken,
the darksouls rise again,
moving forward to the next.

◄ Last day

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<Deleted User> (7212)

Wed 5th May 2010 18:55

I'm sure there's a happy ending in there somewhere...

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Andy N

Wed 5th May 2010 08:24

defo could be part off a book - you may need to look at your line endings here in particular, chuck as it is a bit odd in places.

However, the content is good stuff - orange light is nice and the ending while not lovely (if you know what I mean) defo has the feel of a thriller for some reason.

keep it coming! x

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clarissa mckone

Wed 5th May 2010 02:49

sounds like part of a book. I like how you write.

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