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The Hour of the Critic

 

I sit here convoluted; a heart with thoughts,

laddered, essential for a cause,

an impulse protector, and a radio knob

for outside contortions.

 

Intentions, the aches as habitual as breathing,

are safe as a puckering bud but, tasting

the back of my lips I find

a syndicate of vines,

thorning the future for fuck ups.

 

I fall over a root, sampling time,

cutting up my knees for art –

the grandiose, the profane,

each questioned limb retracts

in the refined weather of you,

and settling in between is a permanence,

a suspended child willing the will of work away.

 

It makes me stamp my feet –

I do not know how to stifle the human –

and reach for the stream of heaven

to burp in my veins,

diluted, like a victim of thought

un-thought,

forgetting that I sometimes reign the brave.

◄ The Rib

The Sculptor ►

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Ray Miller

Thu 27th May 2010 10:16

I used "unthought" in the last poem I posted, without being certain it's a proper word. So I'll assume it is now.I love your inventive way with language, without always grasping what you're on about, though that's not the be-all. Funnily enough, I thought the best line was the simple "It makes me want to stamp my feet".

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Andy N

Thu 27th May 2010 08:11

enjoyed this, marianne.. top banana in particular 'a suspended child willing the will of work away' but the language is generally pretty crisp and shows a lot of thought...

i enjoyed this! x

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