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Perverse determination
in an immovable obstruction
with rapid undulation of
unwanted erudition.

Permanent deflation
of inflated aspiration
with self commiseration
and excuse of mitigation.

Round-about excursion
on a search for inspiration
with a futile operation
and a dead-end execution.

◄ Escapism

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Anthony Emmerson

Sat 29th May 2010 15:10

Hi Kath,

Did you have a dictionary for breakfast yesterday? This works well for me as you acheive meaning with economy. The one word you might wish to look at (and I see you use it twice, so it might be a typo!) is the second "aspiration" (second line, last stanza)Did you mean "inspiration"? It's just that it seems to make more sense.

Regards,
A.E.

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