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Voice

 

Somewhere out there exists a voice,

Distinctive and unique as yours,

Which shuns the norms of rise and fall

And spits out harsh staccato roars.

 

Though issued from another place,

It soon seeps through inside your skin,

And, once you bolt too late the doors,

Invades your conscience from within.

 

At first you notice minor traits:

You say things that you do not mean,

You run down allies and praise foes

And sanction dirty deals unseen.

 

You feel the warnings from your heart,

As you sup from a bitter dish.

Your senses, mined down to a husk,

No longer bend to your own wish.

 

The occupier whispers low,

In softer tones than you first heard,

But its control is absolute,

Your last defiant stand absurd.

 

One day you realise you have changed;

This process cannot be reversed.

The voice will chase away your friends;

Your former self departs by hearse.

◄ Inadequate Translation

Pain ►

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trevor homer

Fri 8th Jan 2021 12:41

I like this. But to me they were never really friends; and true self will always rise. Thanks Stephen

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Stephen Gospage

Thu 7th Jan 2021 18:04

Many thanks once again to all who have liked and/or commented on this poem.

Ruth - thanks for your added verse, which I enjoyed very much.

Aviva - after yesterday's events in Washington, it looks as though we need the cure urgently!

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Wed 6th Jan 2021 20:03

Thank you Stephen, nobody before has ever written a cure just because I asked, and not only that but the cure seems like it should work really well! ?





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Ruth O'Reilly

Wed 6th Jan 2021 18:54

Great poem Stephen, the use of voice is one of my favourite topics and this is certainly a welcome reminder to think before you speak!

There's many a moment
Within a day
As words in
Sentence strung
One wonders why
They say
What they say
When they
Should have bit
Their tongue!?

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Stephen Gospage

Wed 6th Jan 2021 16:40

Just to add to yesterday's post, I suppose that this poem was intended to relate to the takeover of the minds of any entity (individual, group, nation) by some invasive force, represented here as a voice. Examples would be cults or pernicious 20th century ideologies, especially those promoted by dictators or populists.. For the mass of recipients, the voice can be almost unnoticed, or else plausible, even comforting, until they effectively become different people to when they started. By then it is usually too late to fight back.

But, as most of you say, the voice can also involve a more insidious change to people's personalities, depicting the 'road travelled', especially as we get older.

I think the cure is to remain curious and to question all received opinions, not just remain inside a bubble. Don't let the bastards grind you down, particularly if they went to Eton and want your vote. And, of course, submit poems to WOL!

Thanks to everyone for an interesting start to the New Year.

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Stephen Gospage

Tue 5th Jan 2021 16:57

Thanks to everyone for the comments and for hitting the likes. I hope I haven't made people feel too miserable! Aviva, I'm working on the cure, although to be honest I am not sure what it is yet! Let's hope there is a way of reversing 'the process'.

Apart from that, all the comments make me think that I haven't figured out what my own poem really means! So all your thoughts have been much appreciated. Who knows? There may be a spin-off or a new version. Let's see.

Steve

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John Coopey

Tue 5th Jan 2021 09:59

I recognise much of this in myself.

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keith jeffries

Mon 4th Jan 2021 22:46

A poem filled with wisdom and a road travelled by many. It comes as a salutary warning.

Thank you for this
Keith

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Mon 4th Jan 2021 19:25

Good stuff Stephen. People can become negative as the years go on, becoming bitter and uncompromising. I think the ability to see yourself as others see you helps, easier said than done.

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Mon 4th Jan 2021 18:18

Very stark.
Now that you've written of the malady you must write of the cure, please!

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Stephen Gospage

Mon 4th Jan 2021 17:40

A cautionary tale, of some sort......

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