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Often used as a fake New York city from 1920 but Manchester, you ain't fooling
nobody.
The mucky Neo Roman columns built on hurt and hierarchy are testemant to lives,
lived in poverty.
Lowry could see, he correlated the city funnels with, human misery.
Here I sit, here I stare, at the weathered wealth of my city,
Old buildings are barely standing,
Outflanked by looming apartments,
But I'm having none of that,
Apartments are flats.
Walking paces vary,
But there is an uncanny synchronicity in this city,
Some have direction, chutzpah and meaning,
Others sad, shuffling and sedentary-
Trams belch out horns
The stories of each person is secondary to the omnipresent city
Two miles down the road a baby is born
A bored bin man hasn't smiled all day, why?
No one cares about his sore feet and paltry pay.

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manchestercitynorth west city

◄ Uncertainty

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Tom

Sun 31st Jan 2021 12:24

Really enjoyed this Emma, I think it works really well as is. Paints a vivid picture of city life.

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Emma

Sun 31st Jan 2021 11:48

Thanks for the comments! ? Greg, you said 'there was a lot going on' and I'll be honest Directions is two seperate poems shoe horned together. This is the second one:
Walking paces vary,
But there is an uncanny synchronicity in this city,
Some have direction, chutzpah and meaning,
Others sad, shuffling and sedentary-
Trams belch out horns
The stories of each person is secondary to the omnipresent city
Two miles down the road a baby is born
A bored bin man hasn't smiled all day, why?
No one cares about his sore feet and paltry pay.

Do you think it would be better as two seperate poems?

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Greg Freeman

Sat 30th Jan 2021 20:37

Good work, Emma. Lots happening in this poem.

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Mike McPeek

Sat 30th Jan 2021 16:57

A gritty take on the city of Manchester, to be sure, but I liked the feel of this piece. Loved this line: "Here I sit, here I stare, at the weathered wealth of my city"

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