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Old Poem

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Come on, come on, close!
Won’t these lift doors ever close?
You breathe into my mouth
my fingers invade your finery
I was hypnotised across the table
by the explicit silk of your bare shoulders
Now hot air slathers at my forearms
as our legs entangle their thick reef-knot
Behind this crashing waterfall
no one can hear us moan
as you’re bitten for the thrill of it

And in this lift, we write together
the oldest poem, it’s the oldest poem
a poem as old as time

You don’t know this but you’ve re-lit
the fuse of life in me
I’ve been feeling dead for months
in some subtle crushing ways
I’d lost my grip upon the rip chord
of that passionate parachute
Now, I’m risen and roused
heart beating in my lower lip
as it crushes itself to yours
My slight of hand restored
your clasp magically unlatching
All hell is breaking loose
as I soar across your skin

Come on, come on, close!
Doors; gift us some privacy
Lost in the moment, penning together
the oldest poem, it’s the oldest poem
a poem as old as time

And I’ve
never felt so alive…

 

[2020]

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Tom

Wed 7th Apr 2021 17:01

Hi Keith, I'm so pleased you felt it was rampant that is certainly what I was hoping to re-capture. It can get hot and sweaty in the confines of a lift, so moist sounds about right ? Thanks for the like and for reading. Hopefully, I'll write another poem soon. There's got to be one lurking somewhere... Cheers, Tom.

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keith jeffries

Wed 7th Apr 2021 10:58

Tom,
The last place for this poem is the bin. It is masterful, passionate and full of rampant energy. I have read it several times which have left me feeling quite moist.
Thank you
Keith

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Tom

Mon 1st Feb 2021 14:29

Thanks Aviva ? I'd written the first verse and thought to myself that I must have written hundreds of poems exactly like this. So, I saved it as 'same old poem' and put it to one side thinking I'd just delete it. I came back a few months later and it struck me I could work the 'same old poem' idea into the poem itself and then I wrote the rest.

And thanks Stephen for the like! ?

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Mon 1st Feb 2021 12:08

I'm so glad you didn't bin this Tom.
There's life in the old poem yet!

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Tom

Mon 1st Feb 2021 11:53

Thanks for the 'likes' Aviva, Lisa, Stephen and Jordyn.

And thank you Lisa, I'm really pleased you enjoyed. I nearly binned this poem but I couldn't part with it so thought I'd share. ?

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lisa donohoe

Sun 31st Jan 2021 17:05

The flow in this poem was incredible. Well done. Really enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing ?

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