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sunday afternoon

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Like butterflies they flock upon the beach.

So many colours!


Stripey awnings fragile tents boogie boards

bare legs and flowery shorts

sun hats and pink shoulders.

All as busy as bees!

 

There’s such an urgency

in damming streams

and making sandcastles before the tide comes in.

 

The sea is wild but welcoming.

I brought a book with me.

A solitary woman on the beach.

 

In years gone by

I might have wished them gone

but now I like to watch the people.

 

For everyone is  happy on the beach.

They have their fun before the tide comes in

then back to caravan or b&b

and cream and jam and scones

for Sunday tea.

 

I think “observer” is the role for me,

to sit and watch

waves and humanity roll by.

 

The beach shrinks and we all squeeze up

and it’s like a warm caress

and I go home content,

for I have shared their happiness.

 

 

 

◄ ithell

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Joshua Van-Cook

Mon 26th Jul 2010 16:04

I really like this, there's a certain metaphorical quality to 'To sit and watch

waves and humanity roll by.'

This contrasts nicely with some of the more concrete/ mundane items and places in the poem. It feels like a painting, rendered in every visible dimension. Really well done.

- Josh

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Andy N

Mon 26th Jul 2010 08:16

really enjoyed this, ann..

possibly a few edits / cuts may need either be aware for example on the second line here:
' Like butterflies they flock upon the beach.
So many colours!'

In this case, you may not need so many colours as butterflies are by nature (to my colourblind eyes anyhow) colourful..

Either way, it's lovely.. I love beach poems!

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 25th Jul 2010 22:18

Cornwall, Squire! North coast.

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 25th Jul 2010 21:38

Ann, where is your beach?

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Greg Freeman

Sun 25th Jul 2010 19:09

This is a lovely poem, Ann. I really like "the beach shrinks and we all squeeze up / and it's like a warm caress". Oh, and forgot to say earlier, great pic, too!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 25th Jul 2010 19:08

'The beach shrinks and we all squeeze up' is terrific. I also like the repetition of 'before the tide comes in', the urgency of using the beach space while you can, a timeless metaphor much beloved by writers and skillfully handled here, Ann.

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