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Wheeled luggage

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I smoke and watch her

pack.

The taxi waits.

Then like a premonition

I have a mirrored memory

of her departure-

the scent of her 

washed skin-

recalling the

ins and outs of our arguments...

She's smiling as she 

leaves the echo of

our space.

She's laughing as we fail

to finish yet another argument...

I pick through the remains

of the accusations

that she broadcasts.

Then leaving,

sighing,

she drags behind her

-like wheeled luggage-

into a bin

the life that we once shared.

 

words and foto T Carroll

◄ Time to decide

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 3rd Jan 2023 18:07

Thank you Keith, Helen and Leon for your comments
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Mon 2nd Jan 2023 21:03

Stylish stuff TC!


LS

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Hélène

Sun 1st Jan 2023 01:52

The photo is astounding. Wow. And so fitting to the well-worded poem.

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keith jeffries

Mon 31st Jan 2022 11:33

Tommy,
There seems a finality to this poem but one which I feel many will be able to relate to. The last six lines are poignant and seem to indicate an act of no return. It would appear that a climax had been reached in the relationship.
Well put together with an appropriate illustration.
Thanks
Keith

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