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We Make Mud

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We Make Mud 

 

You pretend

I pretend

We all pretend 

That it's all fine

 

Underneath— angst is brewing 

But we try our best

To both appear kind 

 

You pushed

And pushed

And I pushed back

 

I think that you see white

You think 

That I see black

 

From other planets

But bound by blood

I am the rainyou are the soil

Without intention we make mud

 

You won't play fairly

You won't play nice

All on your terms

Not an inch of compromise 

 

I try my best to see through your eyes

But you won't walk a day in my shoes

Whichever way I play this

I always seem to lose

 

And so we stay

Speaking languages that we both don't understand

In theory we are sisters

But we derive from different lands

 

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Bryony Partridge

Tue 16th Aug 2022 12:18

Really like this poem, particularly the brevity and metaphor. And the titular section "I am the rain—you are the soil/Without intention— we make mud" is fantastic and very effective.

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Stephen Gospage

Fri 20th May 2022 15:45

I like this very much, Rasa. I guess incompatibilities go much deeper than 'I say tomato, you say tomato" etc.

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Rasa Kabaila

Fri 20th May 2022 09:28

Thanks Graham and John for your thoughtful reflections. Yep, totally exceeded the ten lines John! I own it in the audio if you fancy a listen- might make you giggle! Ah, family complexities!

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John Botterill

Fri 20th May 2022 08:03

This resonates with me a lot. I love clear image Rasa and the way that it conjours up the relationship. Bravo!
10 lines though? Haha

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Graham Sherwood

Fri 20th May 2022 07:55

I really like this piece a lot Rasa.
The opposites and the complementary facets of each side intriguing but frustrating. Good work, well done!

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