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I have that tape still

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 Enough said  
  and drunk,
  we danced
  and waited for
  coats
  taxis
  kebabs.
 
 holding posters
  of dead rock stars
  we climbed
  my bare stairs
 
  some more wine  
  and the best sounds on tape,
  the bulbs were painted redor blue
  no chairs
  white walls
  carpeted

my flat

 

more drink
and Tom Waits.
 
pushing each other gently
we laughed
and peered out of  
cataract windows.
you stood closer
we were still strangers... just.

Liverpool was wet and outside. 

you held your spliff
in that way that
invites comment.

we choked at its strength,
and laughed.
we kissed   
it was sudden,
I do not know
where it came from,
we kissed again, slowly

 

that kiss,
I venture, 
I return to it,  
I think you sighed, 
god I think you sighed!

I have that tape still...

 

Words and foto Tommy Carroll
    
 

 

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Tommy Carroll

Wed 15th Feb 2023 04:54

Thanks Martin, your comment is most welcome.

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Tommy Carroll

Thu 6th Oct 2022 01:59

Cheers Martin, it's much appreciated.

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Martin Elder

Thu 22nd Sep 2022 21:13

I love the line cataract windows. A fabulous poem with some great lines.
Love it

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Tommy Carroll

Fri 9th Sep 2022 23:08

Thanks Tom & Keith your generousity of spirit is most welcome.

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Tom

Thu 8th Sep 2022 18:18

Hi Tommy, I love this piece. Just the right amount of detail to trigger our own memories while evoking your scene. Brilliant! Tom.

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keith jeffries

Thu 8th Sep 2022 13:04

Tommy,
you took me there and into the scene which also incorporated memories from my past. A delicious poem, which might sound strange, but it was so real.
Thank you for this
Keith

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