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RUNNING THE GAUNTLET

Written for Paul who has had his  problems.

 

Clouds gathering

not the lazy drifting

feather floating

clouds that I have come to love

but a tumult of thunderheads

a boil of molten lead

energy laden

burden heavy

explosion ready

rapidly closing the gap

on the final glimpse of summer blue

the glimpse of what was

the glimpse of what can't be

of birds that cannot fly

of love that cannot die

rapidly closing the gap

laying the trap

that could end in self distruct

or tempering the steel

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Flyntland

Wed 14th Dec 2022 11:36

Thank you for your very welcome Like Holden

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Flyntland

Tue 13th Dec 2022 17:21

John, Kieth, Stephen A. and Bethany many thanks for reading and for your likes.
Rose - praise indeed - thank you
Thank you too to Uilleam and Helene your comments are valued.
My thanks also to Stephen G and Tom for your encouraging comments.

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Tom

Tue 13th Dec 2022 16:33

This is excellent Flyntland. I read it a couple of times to fully savour it.

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Stephen Gospage

Sun 11th Dec 2022 20:46

Very atmospheric and well written.

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Hélène

Sun 11th Dec 2022 17:33

Really like the contrast between the clouds (floating feathery vs storm gathering) & the last 2 lines are powerful (self destruct vs tempered steel). Thanks for this poem...many of us can relate to the described experience dedicated to the fellow you named.

Uilleam Ó Ceallaigh

Sun 11th Dec 2022 16:12

Some nice alliteration there!

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Sun 11th Dec 2022 15:16

I'm certainly no poetical judge Flyntland but in my humble opinion I would say that this poem is certainly taking you in the right direction-great stuff!




Rose 💋

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