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The Ants

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She flaunted her quiet little lover,

Who made no fuss and took out the empties;

Hopped off the bus with a spring in his step

And provided the paradise she craved.

Her friends would say: ‘she looks so much better’.

But now he has left, she sits, immobile,

And when she moves, she spreads herself too thin,

Her cascade of tears moistening the street;

Bereft of all sympathy, except for

The ants, emerging from the pavement’s cracks.

🌷(9)

Love

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Stephen Gospage

Mon 10th Apr 2023 08:01

Thank you, Graham. I must confess that you have introduced me to the 'Red Wheelbarrow'. Perhaps a writer is not always in control of their poem, which is a good thing as it drifts off into unexplained areas.

And my thanks to Nigel, Clare, Hélène and Stephen A.

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Graham Sherwood

Sat 8th Apr 2023 09:41

Intriguing Stephen.
The last four lines reminded me off The Red Wheelbarrow!

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Stephen Gospage

Sat 8th Apr 2023 09:08

Thank you, John B and Manish. Yes, when I look at it again, this poem doesn't give you all the answers. Not yet, at least.

Your comments are much appreciated.

And thanks to Keith for liking this.

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Manish Singh Rajput

Sat 8th Apr 2023 03:53

Another lovely poem Stephen.

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John Botterill

Fri 7th Apr 2023 23:45

I love the poignancy and story telling of this poem. It leaves space for the reader to create scenarios of their own. 😎

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