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missing

Missing

They have dispatched your body
Through a trellis gate
To the sound of the light brigade
The audience ensemble
Looked in different directions
Ocasionally meeting eyes
And fumbling
Awkward went the fingers
Tearful the glances
And the running noses
tumbling
poured outside
Into handkerchiefs
Of rare white and dust
and the must have black
showed flecks of flack
on shoulder blade tack
the brush of a pinstripe worn

strange how you notice

the mountain of flowers spelt names
perfecly pinned to stiff wire frame
hidden away revealed
when washing came a rain
And the ring of roses games
Of innocent children
Framed the cycle of life
Quite fittingly oblivious
To flames and the furnace
The heated stack that scratched
An afternoon sky
Cross hatched the stained glass eye
Poured in

and we wondered if he was looking down
and in privacy we asked

ran silent questions
into double measures
shared gin and brandy
cheers
and cherished treasures
veneers can shine
forever yours
forever mine
missing the ones
passed by





◄ my howling hollow

I only came to get a pint of milk ►

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Francine

Fri 12th Jun 2009 02:23

Que tu sais t'exprimer : )


J'aime ces lignes - c'est la vérité...

'ran silent questions
into double measures
shared gin and brandy
cheers
and cherished treasures
veneers can shine
forever yours
forever mine
missing the ones
passed by'


darren thomas

Tue 22nd Apr 2008 23:57

That's it my boy - give me death. Give me those subtle lines that stroke the hairs on our down of mortality. This is good. This is Peter Crompton doing wheelies on his poetic bicycle, waving at the crowds of fans who gathered to see him jump. They stand open mouthed as his imagery flies through the sky.
Welcome back Mr Crompton. I love this piece. It digs under the reality of funerals. I always think that people who grieve at funerals are usually grieving for themselves and the thought of having to sail through the murky waters of consequence. Nice to see and hear your stuff again.
Congratulations on your placing in the slam!

<Deleted User> (4281)

Tue 22nd Apr 2008 04:47

Hello, Peter

I found your poem with an excellent flow. But there is a sadness in those lines.

Congratulations of your last win! ( I have read that on the front page)

GREAT JOB!!
Zuzanna

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clarissa mckone

Mon 21st Apr 2008 13:03

HI Peter,
Its a very nice poem.

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