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Pang of Dread

A heated argument

Takes a drastic turn 

As things fade into black,

And as the white comes back,

One regretfully stands out 

The barricaded door,

And with utmost concern

Knocks and knocks and knocks

Expecting some response;

 

On the other side of the door, 

Water splashes and rinses

Blood, a lot of blood,

And the dreadful flood

Seaps through the door gap.

 

With a stunned face he asks,

'Is it my doing

I promise I didn't mean to...'

She wipes her tears 

Clears her throat and 

Straightens her quivering voice,

'It's alright babe

It's just the make-up.'

 

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◄ Fall From Grace

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Manish Singh Rajput

Fri 17th Jan 2025 12:41

Thank you very much for such an eloquent comment, David. It means a lot to me.😊

Rolph David

Sun 12th Jan 2025 13:34

Hello Manish,
Wow, wow, wow!
Your verses are haunting in their portrayal of guilt and misunderstanding. The tension you create, starting with the heated argument and building to the image of blood seeping through the door, captures the intensity of the emotional storm. The stark contrast between the physical blood and the calm reassurance of the "make-up" in the end is chilling—it’s almost as if you’re showing how easily we can misinterpret situations, particularly when emotions run high. The final line hits hard, revealing both vulnerability and the sometimes strange ways we reconcile conflict. It’s a powerful exploration of the pang of dread that comes with miscommunication and the weight of unintended consequences. Great!

Regards,
Rolph

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