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don’t know

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Don't know what to say

anymore

 

my mental defragmentation 

distills my thoughts

cremated and wind scattered

water tension propelled

pond-gliding chase scenes

surrealistic ballet

 

Don't know what to think

anymore

 

mince meat re-minced

mindless in Seattle

shuttling to and fro

Brownian movements

my emotional upheaval 

seat-belted turbulence

 

Don't know what to feel

anymore

 

economic extravagance

eclectic expediting

bovine ruminations

atop verdant berms

pates bare through seasons

lawless diminishing returns

 

 

 

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Red Brick Keshner

Fri 24th Jan 2025 01:57

Thanks Rolph. 🌷🙏🏻 So glad the format and diction delivered. 👍🏻🕊🌹

Rolph David

Thu 23rd Jan 2025 18:20

Hi Red,
Don't know hits with a disorienting sense of confusion and loss. The way you break apart thought and emotion through such fragmented, almost surreal imagery really pulls the reader into the chaos of the mind. The references to “mental defragmentation” and “Brownian movements” capture that feeling of being overwhelmed by the constant flow of thoughts and emotions, never fully settled. The whole poem feels like a whirlwind, something between reflection and resignation, and that sense of uncertainty speaks volumes. Your unique language and structure give it an unsettling yet captivating energy. It's a piece that sticks with you, making you question your own mental and emotional landscape. Thank you for sharing this—it's both raw and hauntingly beautiful.
Best regards,
Rolph

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