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‘til all my breath is you

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How have you inked this palpitant heart? Let me tell you:

Your barbs extend long and deep, 
far enough to pierce the skin of my resistance, 
with the needlepoint of your persistence.

But not only skin deep— you refuse to settle for what I had to offer. 
You broke the skin and plunged deeper than anyone ever did go, 
pierced right through every venal lining, 
polluted my bloodstream with your insistence.

Infusing ink of thought, rushing in its onslaught, 
sucked through the mitral port into my ventricle, 
left graffitied and stained. Your ink spread toxin, 
tainting alveolar sac transactions 
till all my breath is you.

Such good poison it is too!
 

 

 

 

 

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◄ cowardly survivor

sheen of young love ►

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Red Brick Keshner

Tue 18th Feb 2025 00:16

Thanks Tom! “Rendezvous” is a dear word that’s imprinted in my life-view from when I was 9 or 10 thanks to Richard Harris of “Golden Rendezvous” fame. 🙏🏻🕊🌷

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Red Brick Keshner

Tue 18th Feb 2025 00:12

It’s much like walking a tightrope, both exhilarating at once and absolutely terrifying within the selfsame moment; yes! Thanks Rolph 🙏🏻🕊🌷

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Tom Doolan

Mon 17th Feb 2025 22:31

A very moving and evocative rendezvous. 👍

Rolph David

Mon 17th Feb 2025 15:03

Hi Red Brick Keshner,

Your poem ‘til all my breath is you left me in awe. The intensity with which you describe the effect of someone's presence is powerful and evocative. The metaphor of ink spreading through the bloodstream, "tainting alveolar sac transactions," is so vivid, capturing the overwhelming and all-consuming nature of the connection. It’s rare to see such a delicate balance between the destructive and captivating power of love or obsession. Your imagery is striking, and I deeply appreciate the emotional depth woven throughout this piece.
Great job!
Take care,
regards,
Rolph

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