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It rhymes

my many enemies 
all hide inside of me 
the externals got nothing 
on my doubts and self-loathing 

I could be a cliff diver 
under my low self-esteem 
battling windmills 
like pigeons in gale force winds 

I fight I exercise and I read 
sometimes all for nothing 
just when things look 
the most bleak 

you give me a call 
and suddenly 
I’m standing 
seven feet tall in heels

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◄ Richer

Comments

Rolph David

Wed 12th Mar 2025 16:54

Hello Robert,
What strikes me right away is the fearless way you name and face the enemies within — doubts, self-loathing, and that constant inner battle. The images you use, like being a "cliff diver under low self-esteem" and "pigeons in gale force winds," are sharp and vivid, showing just how intense and relentless those struggles can feel. But what makes this piece so moving is the turn it takes — that moment when a simple call from someone lifts you out of it, effortlessly and completely. It’s a powerful reminder of how human connection can ground us when we’re spiralling, and how sometimes, it only takes a small gesture to make us feel strong again. Nice poem!
Regards,
Rolph

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