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Invictus

A resolved father leads his family,

Long standing disagreements laid to rest,

For they came together,

And in unison, a thunderous song was sung,

A new era surely had begun,

Each came to embrace that they so before would detest.

 

A son of merit came upon the scene, 

Through example a collective spirit was bound,

Caught ahead of time,

Working through both dusk and dawn,

And both heaven and earth,

To his efforts, would triumphantly resound

 

Such a family can't be hindered,

Victory begat victories large and small,

Ideal became norm,

The impossible came to be,

And against great odds,

What once was nothing became all.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Crackling

Fri 27th Aug 2010 16:49

How family relationships should be. Mines extended. It resounds.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 27th Aug 2010 10:23

This is good, Josh. It is a huge theme which you have tackled head on, with some very cogent ideas and superb vocabulary. I like the format too, with its unobtrusive rhyme scheme. Just being picky...did you try to get the rhyme pattern of the Stanza 1 into Stanzas 2 and 3, but it just wouldn't co-operate? If so,I know the feeling!

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Andy N

Fri 27th Aug 2010 08:21

interesting piece which i enjoyed, Josh although if i am honest i wasn't wild on the first line or two (could have being me however).

Double-check your spelling (which i am terrible at) also m8 - i am not sure what imossible is for example..

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