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A mathematical problem

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I’d love to tear your clothes off, oh my love

I’d dearly love to do it, oh my dear

I’d really love to gaze where legs are wove

Into the body above, long and clear

Nobody interrupts or interferes

Slowly erupting volcanic desire

Climbing the Mount of Venus and the pair

Of foothills further on with strawberry spires

This food for thoughts of love, music for lyre

I oughtn’t brood on, but can’t move on, love

Although I can’t move on you when we are

When we are two not one, you don’t require

Subtraction, multiplication, but div-

Ision, your decision that costs me dear

◄ A spoonful of Sugar

I wonder will she ►

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<Deleted User> (4281)

Sat 31st May 2008 17:10

Hello, Antonio

I would call this a real fiery love poem. You have expressed yourself openly in this write.
I am glad that this is an Adult poetry site. On some sites that writing would be not permitted due having Children Poetry and young readers there. In that case, your poem considered as an explicit one, excellent write!

Thank you,
Zuzanna

<Deleted User> (5646)

Thu 29th May 2008 11:32

Hi, i don't feel good about this one. I'm here to ask you a huge favour.
I'd like to evolve a poem based on the line i loved in one of your blogs. "savour the day and seize the sunshine." It's just a seedling at the moment.
Before i go ahead with it, i need to ask for your kind permission in the understanding that it will be used to uplift an oppression with a little humour.
A few days ago, i blogged something which offended someone. I retracted it as soon as i possibly could.
I was suitably ashamed. So much so that i removed myself from the "game." ( as everyone sees it.)
Thankyou for giving me this opportunity to express my feelings. I think you'll understand why i just can't comment on this blog of yours.
Love Janet.x

<Deleted User> (4744)

Thu 29th May 2008 09:53

Were you watching "Secret Life of a Call Girl" last night to inspire this one? Maybe not ... the ending is one of loss and touching (in a non physical sense)

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clarissa mckone

Thu 29th May 2008 04:05

HI Antonio, This is wonderful, love how you put it together and the words at play!

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