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letting go (the cards and flowers)

The cards and the flowers

What are we going to do with the cards and flowers?
Except press the pretty petal,
discard the remains
the ribbon and the sagging skin
of helium filled
the dazzing red balloon hearts
are covered in coins
they sagged and they sighed
in thier ceiling descent
we watch them die
I always felt guilty
for not letting them free
loving, gone
now what do we do with the old cards?
friends wrote loving words there
lost loves, the  handwriting
Special form, the way they joined the letters
As unique as the finger, printed scent
released
how long do we hold on
to a lid that gathers dust
Less frequent the visit
In drawers, where we fold
And trust the treasure
And as though on an upward journey
we designate to the loft
And winter keeps us out of there
gifts of loved ones
Past and present
At that particular  time of writing
Lay another world, two different people
From now…..
strange how things progress
and I wonder if I have moved forward
or just found a chasm, and remained there…
since parting
How many missing persons
From the past
always one in particular
I’m sure
singled out as special
That touched you heart
In a way you believed truly real
Dare you touch that wound
The sketched red heart of steel
with biro pen
Underlines a time, when
We loved
And as though a maturing wine
Our infant lovers choice of words
Fitted the time
Would we use the same words again
Or does maturity spoil
The purity of feeling?
As we shroud ourselves
In the complications of this modern time
As we cloud thinking
We, the world and its mechanism
Slowly milking what was once
A virginal colour
The card, is off white
It has become faded with the curse of time
But the sentiment is the same
If that love interest
Waned under a mountain
If that lost love interest
Is shaped across our ‘anvilled’ hearts spiked
with tears the hammers
On which drops strike
Blue blotting like ink spreads out
Gentle ripples in this hour
As we sit cross legged reading
All these tucked away gifts
Perhaps Reading that forgotten
card can bring it all back
if only in a place in your mind
that we set aside for such…

I want you to hold on for a minute.......
let......
closed eyes... drift..
reach and touch,
lost lovers again....
let fingers follow loving lines
and the scribbles
and the spills of wine
may they re emerge
like the ghostly mist
of any autumn morning kiss
missing.

I feel I must be brave
As the time has arrived
Almost like a reaper, sheaved
to
discard mine
under flame
A calm day I choose
Orange tongues lap,
the rose of your choice
slowly receeds with criminal ashes
The paper curled
The drawer rejoiced
As it lay empty
and I cried
For I felt the same way
oblivious to you
the outside
is curiously cleansed
yet lays a heart chillingly empty.





Pete Crompton
Sunday 1st June 2006, dedicated to the song ‘smile’ by David Gilmour.


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Francine

Sun 24th May 2009 04:21

Oui, c'est triste, mais romantique...
J'adore le fait que tu arrives à exprimer tes émotions avec telle passion...

<Deleted User> (5646)

Tue 3rd Jun 2008 19:54

The only song which sprung to mind was "smile, though your heart is aching. Smile ,even though it's breaking."
I did search the computer library but i didn't see anything by David Gilmour.xx

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clarissa mckone

Tue 3rd Jun 2008 03:20

Hi Pete, I looked up the song, it reminded me of some other songs, by others. So as you know I did take the time to listen to the song and read the poem. Its really very good! I can see how you could connect the two together. The song in a way brought the poem more alive, made it deeper! Dont we all hold on to those little things, from past loves? There is always that "special" one, or two "special" ones.That if given a chance, it could have worked out.Many times for me, a song has made a poem live within me and I put it to paper. I guess the music of Lorenna Mckennitt, may have produced the most poems from me, an almost hypnotic effect, as if spirit leaves flesh. strange I guess, but thats me! great poem.Never feel bad about trinkets/memories, they are woven into your heart and in part made you, who you are!

<Deleted User> (5646)

Tue 3rd Jun 2008 00:14

I'm not sure if The song is in my collection, it's like looking for a needle in a haystack. However, i'll search and let you know. It's one i'm not familiar with but might know it when i hear it.
I'll get back to you! x

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Jeff Dawson

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 23:22

Tremendous Pete, blimey you did need to write! really enjoyed it, cheers Jeff

Pete Crompton

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 23:01

Its very special and moving for me to know this poem has stirred amotion ad hopefully brought joy if only in a melocholic but romantic way to all of you.
My appreciation goes out to you, and Mel and Antoni, so much thanks for what you say.

Ive tweaked this one. I think its one ill always be slightly fiddling with, its carved

If you wish, why not try reading this poem and perhaps play the song which helped its creation. its a lovely ballad by Dave Gilmour. 'smile' from his new Album.

I would like to know if it works for you or at least if you could connect with the song...

I'm very interested to hear from you about this as I am very much into interaction with other art forms. I especially like to know what stirs and whether any new ideas or feelings come forward.

<Deleted User> (5984)

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 22:06

A truly beautiful poem Pete...emotion simply drips from each line. I think the curve of the rhythm and your line endings are simply stunning.

Melx

Pete Crompton

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 19:17

Thanks Janet, Zu and Clarissa
I will remove some perts of this poem and compact it a bit, I'll be careful to keep the ride going.

x thanks

<Deleted User> (5646)

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 17:10

The more i read this, it wrought so many varied emotions, it was difficult to imagine in ones lifetime. It's a fantastic ride!
I mean read. sorry.couldn't resist.
My temples are throbbing though!

All in all, i think this is a personal best for you.
Great stuff.
(ps. much better than a steam train at full throttle) for me anyway. Janet.

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clarissa mckone

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 13:46

Nice Poem Pete!

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Mon 2nd Jun 2008 07:25

Hello, Pete

Beautiful poem penned with feelings and emotions. You have examined your life getting back memory lane, in this stanza...

""The sketched red heart of steel
with biro pen
Underlines a time, when
We loved
And as though a maturing wine
Our infant lovers choice of words
Fitted the time
Would we use the same words again
Or does maturity spoil
The purity of feeling?"""

EXCELLENT!

Thank you,
Zuzanna

Pete Crompton

Sun 1st Jun 2008 15:44

I feel the need to write, Paul. :-)

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Paul F Blackburn

Sun 1st Jun 2008 15:41

Never mind all this poetry guff what about scrabble it's your turn!

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