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Away From Comfort

Away From Comfort

 

Yellowing bricks in
My eye line
As I sit here.

Waiting.

It's cold
I'm waiting for home
A familiar smell
A sound that I know

But sitting here
In silence
As a train rushes by

I'm thinking of you
I'm longing for you

As every sound
Makes my ears prick up
I'm wishing it was
The sound of your voice

As every second
Ticks by

I wish you were here.

◄ My Inspiration

Desire or Truth? ►

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 15th Sep 2010 22:44

Explain your allusions. what is the familiar smell? A familiar sound, how cold is it? brittle, smarting, deathly etc. Bring it to life for us.

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Andy N

Wed 15th Sep 2010 13:31

very sad stuff. does have a song like quality to it too...

enjoyed it although it is very sad stuff but the silences seem to work well for me. nice one! x

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