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Womb with a view

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The pain of life climbs upward in a line

At forty-five degrees from left to right

Before conception everything is fine

Millennia make up one long peaceful night

That’s bare of nightmares, reality’s bite

Then some dick thinks with his, the jizz meets egg

And all that jazz; addicted to the fight

The hybrid parasite kicks out with leg

But when womb’s closing time is reached will beg

To stay dependent, waited on full-time

Sirens of prison, syringe, lines of white

Pickled liver, retiring to a dreg

Of mankind, call out: come to us, rewind

Retreat, relax behind the lines, that’s right

◄ Dark June

One green bottle ►

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Jeff Dawson

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 23:18

A few great lines here mate! cheers Jeff

Pete Crompton

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 23:07

"The hybrid parasite kicks out with leg" bloody hell thats good.

It reminds of Brett Anderson Lyrics.
he wrote a line once 'bitch of an itch' and it reminds me of some of your stuff.

but yes 'hybride parasite' I like it.
this is also very lyric like and would suit a song.
It also reminds me of the style of early Human League, in particular, the song 'Life Kills' (from the travelougue Album)

great.

<Deleted User> (5984)

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 22:09

What a powerful opening first line of a poem. Wow. "The pain of life climbs upward in a line". it really draws you into the poem.

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