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One green bottle

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I put down shopping bag to open door

And - quelle surprise! - the glass bottles topple

And crash against the unforgiving floor

Thank God there is no wine or beer puddle

Narrow escape again. It’s no riddle

Really, certainly no conspiracy

So why does my mind still grind and grapple

With forces that are imaginary

And all seem to be lined up against me?

Survival instinct kicking in? Though flawed

It keeps me on my toes, makes me brittle

The bottle is my soul, its expiry

Glimpsed as when lost at night-time on the moor

Or leaning over cliff edge, I stumble

◄ Womb with a view

Doing Bird ►

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<Deleted User> (5646)

Wed 4th Jun 2008 12:07

Re your comment on my blogs.
No yes yes no? sorry, not with you there.
I told you the reason i decided to delete all my blogs. To wipe the slate and start again.
but here's one just for you. 'coz angels are not just for christmas either.

A mind awash with painful thought.
Hazel eyes that sting as a
misty glaze takes over
all the good intention.
Aims and targets, wasted time.
A river tautens my skin.
Then, the river runs dry
and leaves me still and calm.
Lol.x

<Deleted User> (3509)

Tue 3rd Jun 2008 22:39

I suppose it's a bit like 24 hour drinking in Wigan.
Hey, we get by.

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Jeff Dawson

Tue 3rd Jun 2008 22:00

Very thought provoking A, where did you get the photo!! cheers Jeff

<Deleted User> (5646)

Tue 3rd Jun 2008 20:08

I gazed at this picture and "saw" the trolley rolling towards me. As it slowly rolled down the steps, i was there waiting with my loving arms outstretched, and wanting to scoop you up from the floor. Just like i did with that book. (my book of angels).
Does that sound too dreamy?

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Philip Golding

Tue 3rd Jun 2008 12:06

An extremely evocative write. Strong imagery of lifes struggle and the despere often felt as we are drowned in this rat race

Well done

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