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ADIEU

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The autumn is crying,

cold rains denying,

North wind burns my face,

colorful leaves are flying,

as they are in a race.

 

I have parted with you

telling quiet adieu,

and it seems for good.

Not having heard I love you,

I quite well everything understood.

 

There was time I believed

when sweet words I received,

I just wanted to be loved,

but you simply deceived,

she has become your beloved.

 

 You’ll be quite well forgotten

as your love was so rotten.

When my wounds are healed

I will start a new life,

in a new house, on my own field.

 

Larisa R (Odessa, Ukraine)

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 20th Sep 2010 07:05

It is good to get comments but it can be hard when people like different bits. One poem I did a while ago someone said "leave out the third verse!" then someone else said "the third verse is the best one". But we're all different aren't we? One day someone on here will write the perfect poem and EVERYBODY will LOVE ALL of it! xx

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Sun 19th Sep 2010 20:12

It is so interesting to read your comments my dear friends. One says I love the first line, another one says I love the last verse. But I would like to say: I love you all. Your comments are so important for me.

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Lynn Dye

Sun 19th Sep 2010 19:44

I love the first line and the first verse, Larisa, and also the optimism in the last. xxx

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 19th Sep 2010 08:21

I love the last verse Larissa! Nice poem. And I love autumn as a time of year. xx

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Sat 18th Sep 2010 18:10

Autumn is the best season of the year for parting. lol Spring will come soon and ...new love poems and romances will appear.

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Sat 18th Sep 2010 18:06

Is it really so sad, my dear friends? The end is optimistic, isn't it?

<Deleted User> (6895)

Sat 18th Sep 2010 17:56

Good evening Larisa-oh what a sad poem! but well done nevertheless-Stef-xx(M-xx)

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Sat 18th Sep 2010 17:34

Oh my dear friend, the pains of deception bite so deep, those wounds take so long to heal...
Best wishes, Dave

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