two women on the edge
We sit above the blueblack sea
as the sun settles.
Wrapped in winter
coats in our September.
Two women crying, laughing,
going crazy
with our pink
champagne.
All the others are inside
for warmth
and music.
Our teeth chatter but we feel
alive.
Below the doomy sea
can crash
but we are here,
above it.
We've known each other for so long
yet
tonight we begin again.
We talk
of metal and fire, of earth and water.
We meet our elements.
Yes, we are on the very edge
of something
but we are not afraid.
And to our left a planet sparkles.
Ann Foxglove
Wed 29th Sep 2010 10:16
Oh Graham - so much to change so much to leave alone - that's the trouble with this friggin' poetry!! Which is which?? ;-) I really appreciate your comments, always! The sun was settling, at least how I imagined it, like a chicken nestles down into her nest at night. But I guess that cosy image clashes with the rather intimidating sea. I will try again with it. Ta once more.