I feel the distance
The quiet room becomes loneliness
Walls, distance between me and you
But the real distance between us is in our hearts and minds
Lines drawn, boundaries made
You say numbness is your friend and you can’t trust.
Trust in our friendship or all is dust
Rusting tears and drawn out fears
I have to come to about your well being
But your only seeing lies right now
and however many lies you believe
it doesn’t make them the truth
the truth is hard to handle
it cuts like an knife at an angle
like slash across flesh soft and thin
it feels as if its across my heart
ignorance is bliss
but lies kiss
is poison slowly killing your soul
the truth like a scalpel
hurts but it removes the cancer
and drains the pus filled fluid of lies.
garside
Sun 3rd Oct 2010 18:56
Hi Daniel - i would consider cropping this - i get the tenor of your angle
less is more -
This room is loneliness
Walls between me and you
But real distance is in our hearts and minds
Lines drawn, boundaries made
hope this helps - Daniel i have read much of your work - i appreciate your focus - less would intensify your feeling
steve x