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The Hare

Last month's poem of the month writer,Gaia Holmes, has chosen this month's poem. Gaia says,"I've chosen 'The Hare' as I love the sharpness and precision of the language. I love the clear, strong imagery and the way the words effectively evoke a chill. " Find out more about Christine and her work at http://www.writeoutloud.net/poets/christinebousfield THE HARE I’m an arctic ghost, now figure, now ground, a shiver on the white horizon; a fierce and cunning mother, I bear bone-aching cold, a tenth of my life each gestation; teach my young by secret visits to found their form snug as skin: each tastes my elixir for five minutes before I freeze again with the sun. Yes, I am white as the foot of the Virgin, eyes set on heaven, my children, melancholy, drink my songs in darkness. But I have two faces, two dances to wrong-foot the gods. I scurry, a shadow, carrying wild grasses to those they would see die.

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<Deleted User> (5228)

Sun 20th Jul 2008 15:20

Brilliant imagery, except for last line of 2nd stanza: "a tenth of my life each gestation" is not poetic. It's too technical and betrays the flow of the poem. A little wordsmithing could fashion the same idea into a more poetice flow.
The poem could also be strengthened by removing unnecessary words. Tighten it up a little.

<Deleted User> (5090)

Thu 26th Jun 2008 22:14

Wow, I loved that.

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Paul F Blackburn

Thu 26th Jun 2008 17:59

Richard is wrong, neither the poet nor poem have been chosen as poem of the month on this site before this month - check the list.

When winners are asked to chose the next poem of the month they are given a list of previous winners and instructed not to chose a poem by any one of them to be the next poem of the month.

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Richard Brooks

Wed 25th Jun 2008 17:43

If i'm right this has been chosen for poem of the month before... well deserved, just listended to the audio version, quite haunting, the music works really well.

<Deleted User> (5149)

Sun 22nd Jun 2008 09:58

You voice is capitivating and your words entice... very well structured, I also like the sense of sudden suprise that keeps me tip toeing for more. well done!

<Deleted User> (4744)

Mon 16th Jun 2008 17:04

Exceptional work Christine. I have often sat on high ground and watched the mountain hares. You've captured it very well.

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Julian (Admin)

Thu 12th Jun 2008 16:25

It is beautiful Christine, reminiscent of the opening lines of Keats' The Eve of St. Agnes Eve.
Thank you.

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Jordan Saxby

Tue 3rd Jun 2008 16:32

Very clever poetry, beautiful use of metaphor.

Pete Crompton

Sun 1st Jun 2008 15:58

Great poem. Love the imagery ..I could see it all.

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