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Leaves now a memory

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Battling with bitter wind chill,

wrapped up like vacuumed packaging.

Yet still, the winter wields through

a soft woollen defence.

Clouded breath, feigning resilience,

I walk alongside a failing will.

 

In these harsh winter landscapes,

beacons herald, Christmas, then Spring.

We endure for now, this least favoured season,

attempting polite smiles, through chattering teeth.

White tuned bells frozen on emaciated trees,

Chime still sweet melodies.

 

Frozen droplets on washing lines,

cling like domestic stalactites

Ice princess dolly pegs swan lake in formation

Once remembered air dried cotton sheets.

Kisses blown by ladybirds and dragonflies

hovering in suspended thermal streams.

 

Clinging by a brittle thread onto branches

Refusing to give up the ghost.

The ones that stayed behind,

did not quiver or shake time.

deciduous natal home exiled,

leaves now a memory, passes by my washing line.

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Seasons left behind ►

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Rachael Dunn

Tue 7th Dec 2010 12:51

thanks Andy, thanks Cynthia, reworked the second to last line :) dolly pegs are not really used now its all plastic coloured efforts, but its nice to remember the ones my mum used way back when :) x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 7th Dec 2010 10:21

This is lyrical, full of rhythm, musical and vivid with enchanting images created by superb diction. I find the last two lines awkward: if the subject is 'Nature' then 'Leaves' would be matched by 'passes'; if the subject is a play on 'Leaves' then 'Nature kept her determined way' needs punctuation. Am I whistling in the wind? I didn't know that 'dolly pegs' were still available, except maybe in craftware.

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Andy N

Tue 7th Dec 2010 08:02

impressive stuff, rachel.. i always like reading poems that are as deep as this, and this is a piece that made me think...

i particularly like 'Kisses blown by ladybirds and dragonflies

hovering in suspended thermal streams.'

but top stuff.. x

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