You composed for her - but when a song for me?
How I wanted you to pen a song for me.
So many songs dedicated to her name,
I waited so long but then a song for me!
I can’t be jealous when she has you no more.
With this I can forget Jen, a song for me.
My first beautiful ballad that turned me on,
You wrote like no other men a song for me.
Another song, Lynn, to enjoy for your sins,
Believe it’s true! There’s again a song for me!
And so you should have a song! Thanx for comment on my winters poem, have a good amxas Jeff X
Nice one Lynn!
Enjoyed this Lynn. Ten lines full of hints of a long story and a rich world - lots for the imagination to work on
<Deleted User> (6315)
Wed 8th Dec 2010 07:58
I was pulled in to this Lynn..hello..I have read this format a few times on here and now fancy having a go myself..must look up the format. Lovely work
Well done Lynn. An uplifting maqta too! :-) Win Win xx Title, maybe just Ghazal. What about the first line, could there be a ... or - or at least a , after her? might read more smoothly.
Nowt wrong with that! I echo Ann, a true Ghazal for me.
:-)
Jx
Lovely, Lynne, full of love, honesty, sincerity. A true ghazal. xx
Another attempt!
If you wish to post a comment you must login.
This site uses only functional cookies that are essential to the operation of the site. We do not use cookies related to advertising or tracking. By continuing to browse, you are agreeing to our use of cookies.
Lynn Dye
Mon 13th Dec 2010 13:04
Oops, rather a belated thank you by now, but no less felt, to everyone for such lovely comments.