You composed for her - but when a song for me?
How I wanted you to pen a song for me.
So many songs dedicated to her name,
I waited so long but then a song for me!
I can’t be jealous when she has you no more.
With this I can forget Jen, a song for me.
My first beautiful ballad that turned me on,
You wrote like no other men a song for me.
Another song, Lynn, to enjoy for your sins,
Believe it’s true! There’s again a song for me!
And so you should have a song! Thanx for comment on my winters poem, have a good amxas Jeff X
Nice one Lynn!
Enjoyed this Lynn. Ten lines full of hints of a long story and a rich world - lots for the imagination to work on
<Deleted User> (6315)
Wed 8th Dec 2010 07:58
I was pulled in to this Lynn..hello..I have read this format a few times on here and now fancy having a go myself..must look up the format. Lovely work
Well done Lynn. An uplifting maqta too! :-) Win Win xx Title, maybe just Ghazal. What about the first line, could there be a ... or - or at least a , after her? might read more smoothly.
Nowt wrong with that! I echo Ann, a true Ghazal for me.
:-)
Jx
Lovely, Lynne, full of love, honesty, sincerity. A true ghazal. xx
Another attempt!
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Lynn Dye
Mon 13th Dec 2010 13:04
Oops, rather a belated thank you by now, but no less felt, to everyone for such lovely comments.