The Nearly Moon
I'll watch and I'll stand
and let a passing cloud
hit by moonlight
make a rimmed spectacle
of a distant wait.
I'll shift my weight and
I'll blink
and recall wordless
feelings before
I put into words
those useless conditions.
It's the words,
with their wanton
un-mouthed ache,
that bleat silently
against the ear
and tangle those
as yet un-marked
and un-surveyed
desires.
Their cerebral
obliterating duster
transforming an
ancient passion
into a smudge.
I blink again and return
to my frosted gate
pausing to catch
a reflection
of the nearly moon
break free from
the hiding clouds-
and for an instant
my feelings,
unwritten,
unspoken,
return.
Tommy Carroll
Thu 30th Dec 2010 15:52
@Cynthia: Thank you for your comment on 'Nearly Moon'. The grammar IS the very thing at issue here. Words encroach, words displace and they do so awkwardly. As you read it the flow of the poem IS jarred as is my 'thinking'. My 'thinking' interferes with my emotions. I'm glad you have noted this Cynthia. :o)
PS a revision.