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A Man Walked Into A Room

A man and a room.

A man walks into a room.

He's a man, definitely a man.

Not a lady, or a unicorn,

or an urchin.

 

Does he seek out virgins?

Not that I'm aware of.

Was he at any time a lady?

A man walks into a room.

 

The definite article of a man.

Walking into a room.

Is he Our man?

Our man walks into a room.

 

Tense?

Our man walked into a room.

Our man walks into a room.

Present tense.

 

Whose room? Hotel, office, dining area?

His room.

Our man walks into his room.

 

How does he walk?

Does he limp, hop, skip, stroll?

How he gets there, is that important?

 

Our man is in his room.

Our man is in his room.

 

He stands by a window, his window,

the only window, and waits.

 

Outside is a Tupperware sky

and a silence that stands half asleep.

 

Our man is in his room.

Our man.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 13th Jan 2011 21:23

Very interesting, John. Like a bunch of too-clever scriptwriters 'idea dumping' as they try to frame the opening scene of an episode, hoping inspiration will finally hit on a theme. There seems to be one major writer who is the front liner. Or this could be an internal monologue of someone drafting a story in his mind, a preparatory 'me, myself and I' investigation of an idea. I really like 'The definite article of a man'; it took a moment to peg it. Also, after all that discussion, all you get is 'our man'. If I've missed a major metaphor, please tell me.

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John Coopey

Thu 13th Jan 2011 19:51

I can hear Ronnie Barker saying this.

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Andy N

Thu 13th Jan 2011 08:15

i'm the same as Marianne here.. this defo has a Paul Auster feel to it, although i am not sure if i am honest it needs the last stanza as i think i prefer the ending without it..

<Deleted User> (8753)

Wed 12th Jan 2011 23:48

good piece is this

<Deleted User> (7212)

Wed 12th Jan 2011 18:12

man - that's some poem

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Paul F Blackburn

Wed 12th Jan 2011 17:24

A man and a pen?
A man and a pencil?
A man and a keyboard?
A man and a writing utensil...
Great poem John!
writ

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Wed 12th Jan 2011 12:21

Have you ever read Paul Auster's "Travels in the Scriptorium"?

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 12th Jan 2011 10:07

Very tense! Cleverly done. Leaves me with a feeling of suspence!

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Laura Taylor

Wed 12th Jan 2011 09:57

Sure about that? Definitely a man? ;p

The repetition of 'our man' keeps making me think of 'amen'. Linked to 'virgins'...hmmm. And waiting by a window...of opportunity, possibly.

Interesting - lots in this.


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