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Flambe

 

being as ghazals have been on the menu of late...

 

Like the fire she burns

Leaving embers behind

 

Like the fire she burns

Labouring sparks in minds

 

Like the fire she burns

Leaving hearts a flutter

 

Like the fire she burns

Lamenting lips stutter

 

Like the fire she burns

Lest cold souls forget

 

Like the fire she burns

Lovers past ne’er regret

 

ghazal

◄ Maybe

In memory ►

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winston plowes

Thu 20th Jan 2011 12:55

Hi Alan. Really liked this, It has lots of elements of the persian ghazal like the 5 syllables per line. The rhyme and repetition of refrain but it is not quite in the right format. If you want to know more I have provided a template and some simplified rules in the discussions area here - http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/newsgroupview.php?NewsThreadsID=1127
still an interesting piece, ghazal or not. Thanks also for tagging it, readers can now look at all the ghazals of all different styles (inc yours) all in one place. Win x

<Deleted User> (6895)

Tue 18th Jan 2011 22:22

well Al be ghazaled! is it painful? on a seriarse note I give this poem nine and a half out of five.gudden! my fine upstander.-cheers big ears-monsewerdubbleyew.

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