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The Masked and Unmasked Man

The Masked Man

 

I           He stood there, outlined by the spirits.

II          They were his friends,

I           The masked man raised his arm once again.

II          They cried.

 

I           They moved towards him, drawn by the power,

II          What had he done to them?

I           Each of them, they joined with him to make one.

II          Used. Betrayed.

 

I           The lights went out, he’s left in the dark.

II          Part of him.

I           He stood there and smiled, his power returned.

II          Taken from them.

 

III        No more spirits. He’s gone.

 

 

The Unmasked Man

 

GO ON,

LIFT THE MASK,

 

Nothing.

 

IT HAS BEEN THEIR’S FOR TOO LONG,

GOODBYE.

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Comments

<Deleted User> (5646)

Sun 29th Jun 2008 21:34

Hi Jordan, you know, in my view, this isn't unlike Phils poem on identity... as if the mask is hiding the true self, then when it's removed, there's nothing there. Life situations and people having had too much influence over his life.
It leaves him feeling bereft in nothingness.
poignant and sad.
I'd be interested to know your own ideas of what it means though. Janet.x

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Philip Golding

Sun 29th Jun 2008 01:41

A refreshing approach to poetry. Good work

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Andy N

Sat 28th Jun 2008 10:58

Unusual, but I like it..

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