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Gospel

The morning papers and the scuffers

brought revelation. Sammy wasn't even

his name I discovered and the prayers

I'd offered were misplaced and useless

or somebody else attained salvation.

He wore a Ben Sherman, Doc Martens

and a Harrington jacket but a uniform

isn't a suit of armour and a five-inch blade

punctured a lung, left him clutching at nothing,

out of his element. Dreams of vengeance

were merely ephemeral and anyway

he was more lighthouse than candle:

a warning of rocks not a star to follow.

I tore up Ben Shermans, let others have the patches

and thrice denied that I knew of a Keith.

Not a name you'd fashion into a religion

though I like to think he died for my sake.

◄ Frankley Beeches

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Ray Miller

Tue 15th Feb 2011 11:43

Thanks. Patches refers to both pieces of territory and pieces of clothing. So, giving up both the uniform and the territory.

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Greg Freeman

Tue 15th Feb 2011 08:22

Strange mixture of religion and violence, delivered with your usual meticulous selection of language, Ray. "Let others have the patches". I didn't understand that reference, though picked up enough from the Ben Shermans, Dr Martens, and Harringtons to understand that Sammy/Keith was a skinhead or suedehead. My brother used to wear all that gear.

Philipos

Mon 14th Feb 2011 21:53

Full of metaphors and mystery - all the good ingredients for getting the reader to have a brain workout - I liked this and thought of situations in my area that sometimes fit the scenario

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 14th Feb 2011 16:47

This is so intriguing - I like it a lot.

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